Wikipedia:Peer review/Santiago Martínez Delgado/archive1
Santiago Martínez Delgado[edit]
-Hi English is not my first language so any grammar correction would be appreciated. I intend to Wikkified all major Colombian artists articles one at the time. (They are all very incomplete. I also have a contact with the Museo Nacional de Colombia to obtain pictures of the artists and their works with the proper copyrights for the use in Wikkipedia.
So lets start by fixing this article Thank you for your help. pgehr(Pgehr 17:36, 8 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
Review by DrKiernan[edit]
-*The lead contains too many paragraphs. I should join a few together.
DoneSimilarly, the sections are very short. Can you either expand or combine them? Maybe the middle five sections could be one larger "Career" section with 5 sub-headings?- DonePlease add
{{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}}along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?] - DonePer Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it should be changed to ==Biography==.[?]
- DonePer Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), avoid using special characters such as ampersands (&) in headings.
- DonePlease reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at Wikipedia:Guide to layout.[?]
- DoneAs done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?]
- DonePlease check the licensing information for Image:Revista Vida 1940 Santiago Martinez delgado.jpg
Thanks, DrKiernan 07:17, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
Dear DrKiernan great advice I had done what I could. Can you go ahead and make the grammar revisions? Also let me know of any other suggestions. I will be working on other Colombian artists after I am done with this article so don’t be surprise If I come back to you for advice. (Pgehr 13:53, 9 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
Ace Telephone[edit]
- I know little of art, so have refrained from any edits.
- DoneA writer? He's an artist! * Done"Master Martinez" is bizarre in English. * Done"Raphael de Urbino" (Italian, Raphael da Urbino) is simply Raphael in English -- and WP (the archangel gets second billing). * Done==References== or ==Notes== instead of ==Appendices==. English speakers tend to be confused by double barreled last names especially when not hyphenated (he'd be alphabetized as "Delgado, Santiago Martinez"). * DoneI don't know if Frank Lloyd Wright can be characterized as following the art deco school. * DoneThe article would be better if it followed the Spanish language original more closely. --Ace Telephone 17:55, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
Thank you ACE, I had made some changes, as for the Frank Lloyd Wright issue / in the book about this artist by Joaquin Pineros Corpas- used as reference -- it mention that it was at taliesin where Martinez made his move to the Art Deco Style. --- As for the double barreled last name, is because there are other 3 Santiago Martinez paiters. --- Great help, and if you can look in to the grammar, tone and cohesion (Pgehr 19:03, 9 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
Pgehr[edit]
-It still need's someone to check: copy editing for grammar, style, cohesion, tone and spelling.
(Pgehr 22:52, 13 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
Holguin1943[edit]
-I think the article is great, you may work on the cohesion, yet it would be nice to work in the other prominet Colombian artists ast the majority are stubs, I hope this article get featured. (Holguin1943 18:56, 15 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
thanks[edit]
-The idea is to work on all major Colombian artists; yet I will do one at the time and all the way to GA feature article, so ass soon as this is feature I will move up. (Pgehr 00:59, 16 August 2007 (UTC)).-Old peer review
NEW TO WORK ON AS OF OCTOBER 5 - 2007[edit]
- The article needs to be copyedited by a native English speaker; there are many instances of inappropriate comma use, incorrect grammar, and what appear to be awkward translations from Spanish. (Pgehr 14:25, 5 October 2007 (UTC))