Wikipedia:Peer review/Sophie Treadwell/archive1

Sophie Treadwell

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because peer review is part of the Wikipedia Project Assignment for the Theatre History Course I am enrolled in.

I am most interested to know if the article is laid out well and if the content available is helpful, easy to read, neutral, and appropriately cited. I will continue to add content, which is why some of the sections are a little lacking at present. I welcome any suggestions in rearranging and re-titling sections of the article to make the content more accessible.

Thank you! Always, Jessiechapman (talk) 20:59, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

Comments by USER:Deliirving

Hi Jessie,

• Your lead section is really good. There's just enough information to pique interest, and it explains not only her life, but her writing style and the importance of her work.
• The organization of the sections starts off really strong, but more sections could be added regarding her later life. How/where did she die? Did she have any children?
• There are a lot of good in text links and external links. I also really like your list of further readings.
• Why aren't there illustrations? A picture of her and maybe poster art of Machinal would be interesting.
• The historical development starts really strong-there is a lot of good information. But her later life becomes overshadowed by her works. While the information about her career is well researched, more information about her personal life would be nice.
• The body of the article is very comprehensive. It is well written and easy to follow.
• The accuracy of the information is good, but a few more sources might be helpful. It's great that you use multiple citations for many pieces of information.
• The information is also very clear. I did have one question about one of her works, though. In the description of Sympathy, it is mentioned that there are three characters in play, but only two are named. Why not add the third? Also, should there be a comma after "Jean Traig"? In general, there could probably be more information on her work. The list is good, but a little description might add something more.
• The article follows the guidelines for citations and references, and no templates are on the page or are needed, which is good. I know you're still working on it, so hopefully we'll see some more sources, too.

Keep working on it! It looks really good, though it's clear it's still under construction. Deliirving (talk) 17:17, 9 April 2015 (UTC)

Comments by EDOrt (talk) 20:23, 14 April 2015 (UTC)

• Lead: Strong lead. If one read no more of the article you would know who Treadwell was and why there is an article about her.
• Organization & Content: The headings and organization are clear. This article is rich in simply presented facts about her life and career. What it does not have is the commentary on her career or her importance as a journalist or playwright. In visual organization, would there be greater clarity to having separate listings for Plays and Novels? Or is it more important to have a chronological listing? For "at a glance" clarity, two different lists might be an asset.
• Content: Note there seems to be a typo in the listing of Machinal in the Plays list. The recent production ended in March 2015 (not 2014 as listed)
• Internal links: I would suggest that there are an abundance of unhelpful internal links. For instance, a link to the Roman Catholic Church (which has little to do with Treadwell) and a link to the City of Tucson feel like clutter. Whereas a link to the Wikipedia page for the Roman Catholic Diocese of Tucson might be the more helpful link for a reader. Also a link to Walter Arsenberg might be appropriate (there is a Wikipedia page for him)
• External Links: These are appropriate, but please note the link to "Sophie Treadwell - Research and Production Sourcebook" is not a link to that source, it is a link to the ABC-CLIO website.
• Illustration: are there any publicly available illustration that could be added to this page to give the reader a look at Treadwell, or posters of her plays?
• Coverage: As noted above, this article presents facts well, but there is little analysis from secondary resources about Treadwell's importance or her career other than those facts. The article would be strengthened by relating her to other prominent women journalists, playwrights or intellectuals. Who were her peers? As an article that will be a reference to theater historians, some context for Treadwell as a theater artist and the theater of the 1920-40 in America might strengthen it as well.
• Finally, the article might include a section on Later Career and Death as a way of "finishing the story" that the author begins when making reference to Treadwells' battle with mental illness.

EDOrt (talk) 20:23, 14 April 2015 (UTC)