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Windows NT 3.1

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I've listed this article for peer review because it's a translation of a German Wikipedia GA and I'd like to get it to that level over here as well. Any help to that would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks, -- Liliana-60 (talk) 15:02, 7 December 2012 (UTC)

JoshuSasori - very brief review:

1. I don't like the lead section much. It doesn't summarize the article's contents very well, focusing on some details and omitting the bulk of the contents.
2. Some of the text is a bit freakish: On the other side, a new operating system called Unix was created a decade earlier - wow, is it a bad translation or something?
3. Here: demonstrate the operating system on COMDEX 1990 - maybe demonstrate at?
4. Bill Gates already dominated the market of desktop operating systems with MS-DOS and Windows and hoped to do the same in the networking market with Windows NT - why "Bill Gates" and not Microsoft?
5. developed from anew -> developed anew.
6. strictly spoken -> strictly speaking
7. Most of the article depends on the Zachary reference. Is there another main reference?
8. It would be nice to change to using a harvnb style reference template.
9. The references would be neater in multicolumn format.

The English needs more work checking details I think. JoshuSasori (talk) 12:54, 28 December 2012 (UTC)