Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 June 6
IllusionistDanC (talk) 02:10, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I posted this article but it was deleted on the grounds that it was not significantly notable (A7). I have revised the article and added information. I will also post a link to this version the contested deletion page.
Draykyle (talk) 03:02, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- You have done a better job at showing notability, but I am not sure it is enough for our standards. Adding some more reliable, third-party sources that deal with the subject in-depth would be a good idea. Other small issues:
- Read our manual of style. There are many things that need work, such as the footnotes currently being in front of the period.
- Wikify some more. A wall of black text may not help the reader. Key words such as Austin and Texas should be wikilinked.
- Add some more categories to make your article easier to find.
- Your references are bare URLs, which are discouraged as it could lead to linkrot. Try using the web citation template.
- I hope this helps. Cheers! Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:52, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Eric Hahn (talk) 04:42, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- You may want to read about what Wikipedia is not. The current article reads like an advertisement, including a mission statement and similar things. To show notability, you should use reliable, third-party sources. To learn more about showing notability, read the General Notability Guidelines. I've tagged the major issues on the article page; feel free to come back here for another opinion after you have dealt with those. Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:45, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Can you give me some feedback on this article? Thank you.
Puppet28 (talk) 05:58, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- Feel free to write about Kanomchan. However, Wikipedia is not a cookbook. To write about Kanomchan, you will need to write about it in an encyclopedic manner, in accordance with Wikipedia's manual of style, and use reliable, third-party sources to establish notability. You will need a massive rewrite. Perhaps you could take a look at our article on Tom yum to understand the writing style; if you want to aim really high, take a look at Hamburger or Durian, which have better referencing. Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:40, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
This is my first ever article. I have read through the rules but I am curious if this article meets the requirements for a Wiki article. I tried to have outside sources. I am a 3rd party person to this article and tried to have it balanced. What do you think? How can I approve it? Thanks for your advice. (sorry about posting twice!)
Mtstaffa (talk) 09:11, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- It seems you have done a pretty good job of establishing notability and using reliable sources. However, there is still some clean-up to take care of before it goes live. Most of this stuff is covered in our Manual of Style.
- External links go at the bottom of the page in a separate section, not in text.
- You should add more footnotes to make the article easier to verify.
- You need a proofread; some of the sentences are ungrammatical and confusing. You could request help at the Copyeditors Guild.
- Your references are bare URLs. You should use the Web citation template to help prevent linkrot.
- You should add some categories to make your article easier to find.
- Hope this helps. Crisco 1492 09:33, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks Crisco 1492!! I have worked on the Link rot and will address your other issues you found in the next week. Much appreciated! Mtstaffa (talk) 02:24, 7 June 2011 (UTC)
This is my first article. I am associate editor to the Central European Journal of Computer Science and i need to make wiki entry for the journal. I need feedback for the page, but also help for uploading an image.
Senka2011 (talk) 09:17, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Seeking feedback/review for accuracy so that the "This page is a new unreviewed article." template can be removed.
Thank you in advance!
HMurchison (talk) 11:37, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Amor Group - New article feedback request[edit]
Hello.. This is only the second or third article I've ever fully written, and a lot has changed since I last did anything (a few years ago). Any suggestions on how best to structure this, or anything else I've messed up on that I can sort out?
Thanks
Stephenmcleod (talk) 12:02, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
This is a new article on a point of medical diagnosis, which will be of interest to diagnostic medical sonographers and some patients. I came to Wikipedia looking for a quick reference that would help settle a disgreement between some of the sonographers who work for me, and did not find one. This is my first new article. Have I made any blunders? Is there anything I can do to make it more useful? Specifically, what tags would be appropriate?
Ncprowler (talk) 14:05, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Mike McCarley Article about new president of the Golf Channel Mike McCarley for review please[edit]
Please review. Article references many news reputable stories. Thank you.
Remmick2099 (talk) 14:50, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I am seeking feedback for this page overall, notably for formatting. I am having trouble making the main title, Wickaninnish Inn, appear properly. However, any & all advice would be appreciated! Thank-you.
Frontofthecanoe (talk) 16:36, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I would like to know if the content of the article meets Wikipedia standards and if not, can you offer me advice on what I need to amend to make it acceptable, then that would be most appreciated.
Steve8619 (talk) 16:42, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
- 1. I don't see the requisite notability for this small company.
- 2. The tone is grossly unencyclopedic: it reads like a cut-and-paste from a company pamphlet or website.
- 3. The history should be narrative, not bullet-point.
- 4. There are NO sources whatsoever outside the company's own websites.
- If this article was to be moved into userspace, it would probably be deleted almost instantly. --Orange Mike | Talk 15:20, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
Bunny Bop! is an original preschool web series produced in Canada. It is produced by the creator of The Big Comfy Couch.
Superstarcm (talk) 16:46, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
This is an article about the artist and painter Ismena Halkeiwicz. Please review and let me know of any changes I need to make. Thanks!
HeatherO88 (talk) 16:58, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Is this article suitable for use in Wikipedia? Are the references reliable enough?
Azapro911 (talk) 19:59, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I'm hoping for feedback so the "new unreviewed article" template can be removed. I don't have immediate access to Sea Dwellers and Papa Topside, so it would be good if any additional information from those books could be added. Also, I wish I knew Cannon's precise date of birth.
Gildir (talk) 20:18, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I am beginning to create a page for C S Bio Co., a biotech company in Menlo Park, CA. They are a respected company in their industry, but how can I improve the page up to Wikipedia standards? They have been around since 1993 and are privately owned, so the amount of sources are limited. They have been referenced in a number of scientific journals, would that been a reliable source?
Msutton11 (talk) 20:33, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Is this article on the Survivor single "Man Against The World" suitable for Wikipedia?
Azapro911 (talk) 20:43, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
This was reviewed by a good proof reader who does not login to Wikipedia and suggested changes were made.
This article relates to the Spring Mountain District article in a similar manner to the the Smith-Madrone Vineyard and other similarly listed articles.
I would like the "unreviewed article" designation removed and do not know how to accomplish that.
Charles M Howard (talk) 20:51, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
This is a new unreviewed article. Please provide feedback and let me know if anything needs to be changed. Thanks!
Suite Afton (talk) 21:04, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
Hoping for feedback so "new unreviewed article" template can be removed.
Gildir (talk) 22:05, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
I posted this article but it was not accepted. I have re-done the article from the beggining, article is now in third person, neutral point of view, more references added. Stjgoc (talk) 00:05, 7 June 2011 (UTC)
This is my first article and was written as a collaborative project with another undergraduate chemistry student and reviewed by our professor. I am very confident in the validity of the content; however, I would love to get some feedback on the format and how well the page conforms to Wikipedia's standards. Thanks! Livewire61 (talk) 04:13, 7 June 2011 (UTC)