Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/Rameswaram

Rameswaram

Hi Wiki Peer Reviewers, Greetings. Could you please review the article available and let me know your thoughts. Ssriram mt (talk) 14:26, 9 June 2012 (UTC)

Considering WP:GA?: Comments based on lead, History, In news and popular culture, refugees, Pilgrimage

• Remove all honorifics like Lord, Bhagwaan, Maharishi, Swami

- Yremoved

• Lead has some WP:UNDUE info. "The Ramanathaswamy Temple at the centre of the city has the longest corridor among all Hindu temples in India". This "longest" part is not needed. What is needed is that the temple is dedicated to Shiva and is associated with Rama

- Ycorrected.

• A.P.J. Abdul Kalam is WP:RECENTISM in lead. UNDUE.

- Yremoved

• According to Ramayana, -> According to the Ramayana,(italicize texts)

- Ycorrected

• God Vishnu -> the god Vishnu.

- Ycorrected

• "History" is a POV. Should be "Legend"

- Ycorrected

• "Rameswaram is significant for many Indians as a pilgrimage to Varanasi" -> for Hindus

- Ycorrected.

• "In news and popular culture" is too much WP:RECENTISM. Thirukumaran Nadesan incident is UNDUE.

- Ycorrected. In news taken up with other merging.

• Remove gallery. Not in accordance of WP:GALLERY.

- Yremoved

• Chota Char Dham is UNDUE here. Remove

- Yremoved

• "Support for this account may be found in some of the later versions of the Ramayana, such as those penned by Swami Tulasidas (15th Century) and others":
  • "may be": uncertainty. It is found or it is not found. I can't understand why "may" is asked.
  • wordy: change to -> This account is found in some of the later versions of the Ramayana, such as those by Tulasidas (15th Century).

- Yremoved

• WP:OVERLINK: common words like town, pilgrim are linked. Remove such links

- Yremoved

• IMO "Sri Lankan Tamil Refugees" and "In news and popular culture" should be merged into something like "Interaction with Sri Lanka"
• " the fishermen issues like attack, arrest, harassment by Sri Lankan navy for alleged cross border activities" Highly anti-Lanka POV. The ref is Indian, thus biased. Neutralize using "alleged harassment" etc.

- Ymodified and added SL side of the issue. While the subject is highly controversial, 381 out of a community of 10k necessiates retaining one of the top topics of the town.

• Bhagwaan Ram v/s Rama: standardize spellings

- Ymodified.

• use the common name Adam's Bridge, rather than Ram Setu

- Ymodified.

• "The Tamil Nadu state ranks numbers one in terms of foreign tourists to India"
  • A copyedit for grammar is needed
  • Not supported by ref: "Currently, the State ranks second in number of foreign tourists arrival into the State and third in domestic arrivals"
• the Puranas (the historical records of ancient India): highly questionable description. May be regarded as WP:POV. Replace with neutral "Hindu scriptures"

- Y replaced.

• WP:JARGON: explain jargon like Jyotirlinga, linga, Ramayana. Add short description. eg. the Hindu epic Ramayana, linga - the aniconic symbol of Shiva

- Y replaced.

• Mention a line or two about all major temples/religious sites like Ramarpaadham temple, Lakshamana Theertam etc.

- Y added.

• A section of the temple is needed. (Broad in coverage criterion)

- Y added.

• Accuracy: "The name "Rameswaram", roughly translated in English as place where Ram worshipped Shiva." Rameswara means Lord of Rama in Sanskrit, an epithet of Shiva, the presiding deity of the Ramanathaswamy Temple

- Y modified.

--Redtigerxyz

The religion, utility services, interactions with Srilanka sections have been widely expanded. The reference structure has also been cleaned up to standards. Copy editing and lead portion expansion is remaining. Ssriram mt (talk) 03:42, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

The lead is expanded, over link is reduced and the other portions like see also have been trimmed. Can this be taken to the next level.Ssriram mt (talk) 00:14, 28 June 2012 (UTC)