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Japanese battleship Kongō[edit]

Not mine, so I cannot vouch for the language or the factual accuracy. But it's long, detailed, cites references, and has a fair number of maps and other pictures. LordAmeth 07:36, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose There are only three inline citations, which is troubling, but I think the writing needs some cleanup, as there are a number of particularly awkward sentences that hinder readability. The lack of citations also means that some statements lick "the stunning loss of aircraft carriers a, b, c and d" need rewriting, as I'm not sure "stunning" is an entirely appropriate word unless we can cite either a) the consensus in the historical scholarship, or b) multiple primary source documents that indicate that this was the feeling at the time. It is, overall, a promising article, but it really needs cleaning up. Carom 13:22, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose A very promising article, with a great deal of information - but virtually all of it is unsourced and uncited. Some minor weasal word issues, but my main concern is the complete lack of citing. old windy bear 14:52, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose There a several istances where wikilinks should be furnished or disambiguated. History is thin, armament detail is lacking.GraemeLeggett 15:03, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]