Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Simon Bolivar Buckner, Sr.
Simon Bolivar Buckner, Sr.[edit]
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I have recently done a major expansion of this article with an eye toward taking it to FAC. Before I do that, I'd like to have some more sets of eyes on it, especially since the majority of my sources are about Buckner's political career, not his military career. I would appreciate feedback and suggestions for things that should be improved before the article can pass an FA review. I hope to gather this feedback quickly, because I have to return Borderland Knight to a distant library on September 18. Acdixon (talk • contribs • count) 02:47, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
Abraham, B.S.[edit]
Just a few things that stick out:
- If you are heading toward FAC, you are going to need to add alt text to images. Alt text is a brief, but concise, description of what the actual images are of, and is added to the image markup through
|alt=.
- Added.
- Dashes used in the prose should be unspaced, and be emdashes rather than endashes. For example: "They formed a new party – the National Democratic Party, or Gold Democrats – which Buckner joined." --> "They formed a new party—the National Democratic Party, or Gold Democrats—which Buckner joined."
Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 05:38, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
- Done. Those dashes drive me nuts.
- Thanks for your comments Acdixon (talk • contribs • count) 14:10, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
Ian Rose[edit]
Looks very good, structure and citation appear excellent. Two things from me as well:
- His son would later serve in the U.S. Army and be killed at the Battle of Okinawa during World War II. needs to be cited.
- I can cite this to the younger Buckner's article in The Kentucky Encyclopedia, but though it appears on the same page as Harrison's article on the elder Buckner, it was written by a different author. Should I include two different citations to The Kentucky Encyclopedia in the "References" section?
- Heh, nothing's ever easy, is it?! In that case, if it was me, I think I'd change the book reference to include just the editor's name in the Last and First fields and drop the chapter title after all, since it seems excessive to include two entries for the same book. The aim would be to end up with this: Kleber, John E. (ed.). The Kentucky Encyclopedia. Associate editors: Thomas D. Clark, Lowell H. Harrison, and James C. Klotter. Lexington, Kentucky: The University Press of Kentucky. ISBN 0813117720. You'd have to change your citation Harrison in The Kentucky Encyclopedia, p. 136 to Kleber (ed.), p. 136 but you'd be able to use that citation for the son's fate as well... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:37, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
- In the References section, I'm a little confused by the Harrison books. He's down as both writer and editor and, while that's of course possible in encyclopedic works with many entries, it looks odd the way it's presented here. If you do mean he wrote the Buckner chapter/entry and was also the book's editor, you should probably use the Chapter parameter of Cite Book to give the chapter/entry title to make things clear. Another thing there is that, in any case, you only need to link Harrison's name once in the section.
Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:24, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
- This is, indeed, the case, and I have corrected the entry as suggested.
- Thanks for your comments. Acdixon (talk • contribs • count) 14:10, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
- Couple of other things in References: 1) the first Harrison book is missing a title - I assume its Kentucky's Governors; 2) the entries use a mix of citation templates and manual formatting - should be all templates for consistency. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:37, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
Close please[edit]
Would someone be so kind as to close this review? I'm taking the article to WP:FAC before I have to return Borderland Knight. Thanks. Acdixon (talk • contribs • count) 14:32, 28 August 2009 (UTC)