Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Doctor N. Gin

Doctor N. Gin

I think this article has improved quite a bit since its initial assessment. It has a very clean layout, and it has a proportionate amount of references, though I am aware that there is not enough outside references for it to become a Good Article as of yet. Nevertheless, I think this article's class should be bumped up a notch at this point. Oh, and we still have to give it a label on the importance scale. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 22:34, 23 November 2007 (UTC)

User:Krator

• Some of the information in "Conception and creation" should be summarised in the lead section per WP:LS - only his characteristics are currently there.
• The History section borders gamecruft. Try to merge all subsections into a single one of about three long paragraphs. Also, the section title and layout are confusing - is it a fictional or real-world history. I would suggest to make it the latter, and rename the section "Character Development", and get rid of the "Past History/Present History" subsection thing. Also, what is the reason for the current subdivision in years?
• Reference 16 is no longer there. Try archive.org to recover it.
• There is some jargon in the article. Things like "unlockable" and "double-phased mech" should not be in any Wikipedia article.
• See also "Austria"? Which source says that he's Austrian anyway? Generally, most of the see also section does not make sense in this format. I suggest removing it.
• The "hpzr.freeweb7.com" source looks incredibly unreliable. Is it?

User:Krator (t c) 12:07, 24 November 2007 (UTC)

I've just addressed most of the problems, though I'd like to cite a few things. I know Reference 16 can't be accessed from Wikipedia for some reason, but it can still be accessed from the site, so I changed the reference accordingly. And I assure you the hpzr sources are perfectly reliable: the "Deleted content from Twinsanity" reference was posted by an actual employee of Traveller's Tales, and the "Interview with Radical Entertainment is with an actual employee of Radical. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 14:09, 24 November 2007 (UTC)