Wikipedia talk:Today's featured article/March 8, 2018
Rationale for changes made[edit]
To explain my rationale for the changes I made (and which have have been reverted here):
- Excluding from the first sentence that Bryant best known for her sympathetic coverage of Russia and the Bolsheviks during the Russian Revolution is a mistake, I feel. If the objective is to summarise the article in such a way that readers click through, there ought to be something to draw them in.
- I don’t believe her growing up in rural Nevada, or the kind of degree she obtained, are directly relevant to a summary of this size.
- Since we know from the first sentence that she is a journalist, it should be taken that the Spectator and The Oregonian are newspapers; if an adjunct aim is brevity, specifying two newspapers is unnecessary.
- It is interesting that we say she merely left her husband, when in fact (per his divorce filing) she abandoned him.
- There is a factual error: she married Reed in 1916, not 1915. She had not yet divorced her previous husband in 1915.
- The specificity of of the day is unnecessary — is she going to become Germaine Greer’s best friend in 1920s USA? :)
- That her stories appeared in Hearst papers should signal to at least some of our readership that they were primarily in American and Canadian newspapers; thus …across the United States and Canada is unnecessary.
- If my first point here is to be reinstated, the later phrase Generally in sympathy with the Bolsheviks during the Russian Revolution ought to be removed as repetitious.
- I notice “Hitler” in the Winter War blurb was reverted to his full name, and that here the original text before my edits had Lenin and Stalin’s first names. I can’t find a policy on this but I’m surprised we need anything other than these well-known people’s last names (again, my objective here was brevity of character count).
- I would argue that my last two sentences should be reinstated in full:
After Reed's death in 1920, Bryant continued to write about Russia, among other countries. She died in Paris in 1936 and was buried in Versailles; her grave, which had become neglected, was restored in 1998. The Bryant–Reed story is told in the 1981 film Reds’’.
I don’t think we need a listing of the countries she wrote about; the fact that she continued to write should suffice.
Thank you. — Hugh (talk) 19:52, 1 March 2018 (UTC)
- My understanding (unless someone disagrees at WT:TFA) is that we've started a one-week process where other editors will evaluate your suggestions. This is too much all at once for me to try to handle it on my own. - Dank (push to talk) 20:13, 1 March 2018 (UTC)