Talk:1945 Texas hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 17:06, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The paragraphs in the MH are a little bit asymmetrically balanced. If you can fix them, that would be great, if not, I may let it slide.

Done - Did my best to try to make the paragraphs even. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:13, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Association estimated that up to 20% of the rice crop was lost during the stom." - During the "stom"?

Done - stom - An Erythrocyte band 7 integral membrane protein that in humans is encoded by the STOM gene. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:13, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Though situated on the opposite side of the Gulf of Mexico as the Florida peninsula, tropical moisture extending from the hurricane caused torrential rainfall on Florida. First, "Florida peninsula" redirects to Peninsula#Florida, so maybe you should just simply say "Florida"? Second why do you use "Florida" twice in the same sentence. The part after the comma should be "tropical moisture extending from the hurricane caused torrential rainfall in the state."

Done - Revised to meet your suggestions. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)}

"The hurricane's slow movement parallel to the Texas coast resulted in torrential rainfall. Rainfall peaked at 19.6 in (500 mm) near Hockley over a period of a little over three days." - First, saying "rainfall. Rainfall" is redundant. Second, you have the word rainfall in these two sentence and the following one. I word suggest alternating with "precipitation" at the beginning of that second sentence.

Done - Removed the aforementioned redundancies. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:13, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On reference #1, "Chris Landsea; Neal Dorst (ed.)" should be "Landsea, Chris; Dorst, Neal (ed.)"

Done - Fixed format of names. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:13, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On reference #24, the date is inaccurate and not in the right format: "Souder, Mary O. (1 August 1945)".

Done - Fixed date format, though left the date there since that was standard on all ISBN auto-fills, and auto-fills take data from AMS themselves. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:13, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, you know the drill! Let me know whenever all of these are fixed/addressed and then I will consider passing the article.--12george1 (talk) 17:06, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Good job TheAustinMan! I am going to list this article as a GA now.--12george1 (talk) 17:25, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]