Talk:1999 FA Cup final/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 09:33, 9 August 2019 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 09:33, 9 August 2019 (UTC)

Intial review

Lead

• "Meanwhile, Newcastle beat Tottenham Hotspur 2–0 in their semi-final", meanwhile indicates a corresponding timescale that isn't there. Perhaps change to "In the second semi-final, Newcastle...".

Background

• I'd generally avoid placing refs mid-sentence as ref 4 is. Double stack them at the end of the sentence.
• "the first happened", a little clunky perhaps. "The first meeting took place"?

Route to the final

• No need to link Premier League again in the first sentence.
• "taking on rivals Arsenal", rivals doesn't really add anything here. In the context of a knockout tournament, every team is a rival and Arsenal are not local rivals to United.
• "Newcastle were able to play their semi-final", able to play sounds rather odd.
• "Manchester United's semi-final went goalless", went goalless again sounds odd. Finished goalless?
• "despite Yorke being nowhere near the ball", try to tone down the pov here a little as it sounds like you're the one saying this. Something like "Although United manager Alex Ferguson stated the decision was "absolutely ridiculous" after Yorke was deemed to have been interfering with play"
• "went down as one of the greatest FA Cup matches ever played", big statement with zero sourcing.
• The semi-final replay paragraph reads like a journalistic match report. Phrases like "the celebrations were well underway before anyone realised that the linesman had flagged" and "it was at a good height for him to make the save" need rewording.

Team selection

• "Manchester United's team selection was dominated by the need to save several players for the Champions League final", need is probably the wrong word here. They didn't need to do anything so to speak.
• A lot of repeat links here, Keane, Scholes, Yorke, Beckham, Premier League, etc.
• Ref 21 is dropped mid-sentence with no real need. Move it to the end of the sentence.
• Link Henning Berg.
• "ultimately got the job", too informal.
• "After marking David Ginola out of the game", same.

Summary

• I feel like there's potential for expansion on the match report, it seems relatively short right now. For example, why was Hamman booked, how did Keane get injured? The second half is limited to two chances.
• "drilled it past Harper", a bit journalistic again.
• Repeat links in this section as well, Keane, Schmeichel, Ferguson, Giggs.

Post-match

• Most of the first and fourth paragraphs are unsourced.
• "Manchester United were unable to defend their FA Cup title the following season", I don't think they were unable to defend it, the club chose not to take part.
• "Their misery was compounded", a bit OTT perhaps?

These are the points I picked out in an initial run through to get you started. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 12:05, 9 August 2019 (UTC)

Hi @KingSkyLord:, its been a week since this review was posted and there doesn't seem to be much progress. Do you wish to continue with this? Kosack (talk) 07:58, 17 August 2019 (UTC)

@Kosack: Yes, I wish to continue this review. I've fixed the majority of the issues you've mentioned, with the only part I need to fix being the Final summary. KingSkyLord (Talk page | Contributions) 12:40, 17 August 2019 (UTC)

Just checking for an update on this, it's been three weeks since any progress was made. Kosack (talk) 12:51, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

I'll be looking to close this review shortly as we seem to have stalled. Kosack (talk) 09:13, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

I'm closing this nomination as this appears to have stalled. The match section is still an issue but I don't think there's a huge amount left if the article was renominated at a later date. Kosack (talk) 08:44, 11 September 2019 (UTC)