Some of the game commentary uses a lot of POV wording. i.e.: "That seemed like enough in the hands of the American League's closers". The facts of the game play should be reported, not the opinion of it.
Another example: "but a strong throw by Griffey with a nice scoop by Russell Martin allowed Martin to easily tag Rodriguez to end the inning." (bolded words are establishing a POV)
Several stub paragraphs throughout. Especially the anthems and Umpires (Game)
colour coding in the Final Roster Spot section is ambiguous. I understand that yellow represents the winners of the vote, but why are Oswalt and Webb coded brown? Also, colour coding alone should not be used to highlight.
This remains a problem. The yellow highlighting needs to be explained, and paired with something such as bold text.
Also, are there results for this stage of voting? All-Star Final Vote goes into much more detail. This could be integrated into this article.
Only the first word of section titles should be capitalized, excluding proper names.
One statement I'd like to see sourced, but not going to get all that worked up about: "The game marked the first time since 1953 that one league hosted consecutive All-Star Games, after Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania, hosted the game in 2006." (Background)
Fan Balloting section is thin, however. Would it help to list how many votes each starter received? Also, are the vote totals for the final roster spot player available?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
The image of the golden ball remains commented out for not having a FU claim on this article. This could easily be fixed, and the image restored.
On second thought, this image would not serve to enhance one's understanding of the topic, so wouldn't qualify under WP:NFCC.
Are there images of the game available? Perhaps you could check flickr to see if anyone at the game posted images under a Creative Commons license.
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
The prose and MOS issues are my greatest concern. But, it is fixable. Please let me know when you have responded to these concerns, and I will happily re-assess. Regards, Resolute 00:45, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Looking better, but still a few minor issues. Resolute 01:03, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
After deciding to {{sofixit}} to deal with some of the very minor issues that were outstanding, I have decided to pass this article. Congrats. Resolute 19:13, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
