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Reviewer: Derild4921 21:53, 3 September 2010 (UTC) Back again! Seeing how this is a very old nominee I'll review this now. Derild4921 21:53, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't even recongnize that I had another up for review. Humm? Nascar1996 22:35, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Well, it's from 2 months ago. lol. Derild4921 22:37, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I think I need to redo most of the sources. They are from June. After this race, I really improved my writing skills. Nascar1996 22:42, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, this doesn't look as well written as your other GA's. Derild4921 22:45, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I will not be as active as I normally am. I am busy tomorrow, while being sick. Nascar1996 23:21, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
No problem. Looks like NSD will help along here. Derild4921 00:05, 4 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Count me in :). Airplaneman 13:40, 4 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, I'll be out today for a soccer tournament. I'll be one tomorrow. Derild4921 16:14, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In depth review

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  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  • Lead has to be expanded as with the other NASCAR article you've written.
  • Some terms and phrases are confusing such as "Three drivers had to move to the rear from a change after first practice". What is a "Change"?
The race summary section uses the phrases On lap # and By lap # a lot; try cutting those down.
There are too many, I do not have enough tiime to completely reword it like the newer articles, but I'll see what I can do. Nascar1996 00:51, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I cut down some, how is it now? Nascar1996 00:54, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It looks better now and I took some time to change a few others. Derild4921 18:44, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
This is broken. It is right now ref 12. Find an alternative please.
I have replaced that link. ~NerdyScienceDude 03:40, 4 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  1. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
Basing off the other article this needs Background and Post-Race sections.
 Done --Nascar1996 20:31, 4 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Also, add a "Standings after the race" section if there are any sources for this. Derild4921 18:44, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Nascar1996 19:55, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Ref please. After I read through the article one more time, we should be done! Derild4921 21:42, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Nascar1996 22:09, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  1. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  1. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:


  1. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  1. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Congrats! I have passed the article! Derild4921 23:36, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from other editors

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 Done Nascar1996 12:57, 5 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]