Talk:2015 Singapore Grand Prix/GA1

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:02, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing this article. Comments will appear soon. Z105space (talk) 18:02, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Background[edit]

  • Link FIA to Fédération Internationale de l'Automobile
 Done
  • Mention Pirelli are Formula One's sole tyre supplier.
 Done
  • There should be information on the championship standings heading into the race.
Added standings before the race section. Unfortunately, I couldn't find a clear archived standings link for the constructors' any date before the GP, so I added a link to the ESPN standings site, where the points are devided up clearly so that the points can be calculated together and prove the point. Added a similar section for after the race as well.

Free practice[edit]

  • "Per the regulations for the 2015 season, three practice sessions were held; there were two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday and another one-hour session before qualifying on Saturday." Change 1.5-hour to 90 minute
 Done
  • "The two Mercedes car" - You are missing the s in cars
 Done
  • There are two mentions of the words "Manor Marussias" which should be changed to either Manor Marussia drivers or cars.
 Done
  • Remove the worlds "Manor's newcomer" and "rookie" before the mentions of Rossi.
 Done
  • You're missing "the" before "pit lane" and this should be done before the next four mentions of the word "pit lane".
 Done

Qualifying[edit]

  • "both Force Indias and both McLarens" I feel it should be written as "both Force India and McLaren cars"
 Done
  • Instead of writing Q2, it would be easier to write out the second part of qualifying so the non-racing expert will understand, but you may use the abbreviation as well.
I've made this clearer by introducing the abbreviation at the beginning of the paragraph.

Race[edit]

  • "However, his mechanics were able to mend the problem" - replace mend with rectify
 Done
  • Delink Toro Rosso as it is already linked in an earlier sub-section.
It was a link to the specific car, I took out the alternative title.
  • Wikilink Virtual Safety Car.
 Done
  • "Around the same time, Vettel was holding a five-second advantage over Ricciardo." While I understand what this means it would be better to re-worded this to "Around the same time, Vettel held a five-second advantage over Ricciardo"
 Done
  • Remove the word "rookie" before Alexander Rossi's first mention here.
 Done
  • "At the restart, Sainz, Jr. was caught out by his car being stuck in neutral, losing many places and dropping back to 18th position, but able to carry on." - Please specify how many positions Sainz lost and reword the last section of the sentence to but managed to continue.
I changed the last part of the sentence, but since I do not know which position he was in before the restart (the source does not specify), I cannot give the number.
  • You have Carlos Sainz called as "Sainz" or "Sainz, Jr." here and in the qualifying-sub section. Only one of these should be used throughout the article.
 Done Changed all to Sainz.

Post-race[edit]

  • "Following the controversial refusal by Max Verstappen to follow team orders and let his teammate pass in the closing lap of the race," - replace "closing" with "final".
 Done

References[edit]

  • References 1, 13, 47 (both formula1.com references) use Formula One Adminstration as their publisher, whereas References 9, 10, 11, 12 do not have a publisher, Reference 16 uses FOM and Reference 49 is simply FIA when the work should be formula1.com.
Changed all publisher parameters to "Formula One World Championship Limited". Also archived all those references, since that website is often producing dead links after a while.
  • Reference 3 redirects to a source page. Can you locate an archive link?
Exchanged that ref with archived link.
  • Reference 17 - ditto.
 Done

On hold until the nominator rectifies the above issues. Z105space (talk) 16:16, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Z105space: I think I've done everything now. Thank you once again for a good review :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 20:55, 19 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Zwerg Nase: Good job. Promoting to GA class. :) Z105space (talk) 21:08, 19 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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