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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 22:36, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]


And again. Trying to get this backlog under control!

Lead
  • "Lotterer initially pulled away from the field but lost the lead to Mark Webber in Porsche's No. 1 car and remained in the position when he handed the vehicle over to co-driver Brendon Hartley." This sentence is a bit confused as it switches who it is talking about halfway through. Maybe reword to "but lost the lead to Mark Webber in Porsche's No. 1 car, who remained in the position"
  • "This handed the position to Neel Jani in the sister No. 2 car but lost it Tréluyer when Jani's co-driver Marc Lieb was delayed by a slower vehicle." Couple of issues here: Firstly, I assume it should be "lost it to Tréluyer"? Secondly, it might work better as something like "This handed the position to Neel Jani in the sister No. 2 car, but the lead switched again to Tréluyer when..."
  • "..after being bulked by slower cars.." Is this meant to be blocked? If not, what does bulked mean?
  • "..first podium result in the series since the 2013 6 Hours of Fuji." In the lead, it is probably sufficient to say "..since 2013."
  • "Sam Bird and Davide Rigon in the No. 71 AF Corse Ferrari was unchallenged.." Plural, so should be "were unchallenged".
  • "The Le Mans Grand Touring Amateur (LMGTE Am) category was led throughout the final stages by François Perrodo, Emmanuel Collard and Rui Águas and won their first.." Should be "who won", not "and won".
Background
Practice
Qualifying
Race

As with the others, a good piece of work with just some minor prose quibbles from me. Harrias talk 22:36, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]