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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 17:43, 20 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take this one. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 17:43, 20 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Point one is that the lead needs to be expanded beyond its current length. It doesn't properly summarize the article; check the GA standards for leads. What is there is appropriate, it's just that the lead needs to be more substantial.
  • The term surrogate alcohol doesn't need quotation marks, it is valid, accepted terminology.
  • The inclusion of "See also: Alcohol consumption in Russia" above the "Cause" section doesn't seem to be entirely appropriate, the inclusion of the relevant facts from that article in this one is just fine.
  • "...led the Associated Press to…" we can put a wikilink in for the AP.
  • It might be a good idea to add some explanation on how the lotion is consumed as alcohol exactly (drunk straight from the bottle? distilled somehow?). Maybe thats why you have the "See also:" link; it's still a bester idea to just provide quick elucidation here.
  • "...with one senior official for the greater Siberian region…" governmental official or lotion company official?
  • The note on surrogate alcohol is not entirely necessary since you link to the article anyway.
  • Good job with the article handling a tragic event, they can be hard to form together. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 00:31, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]