Talk:2016 Spanish Grand Prix

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Gif[edit]

Does anyone think that that GIF is pretty ugly? I would try and find photos on Flickr (as I usually do) and replace it. Anyone object? Zwerg Nase (talk) 21:12, 17 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take on this review. What a historic day for all of motorsport. Z105space (talk) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

General[edit]

  • One thing I keep noting in your articles is that you sometimes spell the drivers' full names out after the first instance. It's best to avoid this.
  • Hmm, I always try to keep the prose flowing, with full names often in new sections, to make it a little easier for readers who might not read the entire article... Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:25, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

  • The first mention of team-mate should be unhyphened as is seen in the rest of the article for consistency.
  • "Max Verstappen won the race upon his debut for his new team Red Bull, having swapped his Toro Rosso seat with Daniil Kvyat ahead of the race." - try to avoid repetition of the word "race"; in the second instance it should be "event".
Both  Done

Free practice[edit]

  • "two ninety-minute practice sessions" -ninety-minute should be spelt in number form per MOS:NUMBERS for consistency with high-value numbers as is seen in the article.
 Done
  • "The Mercedes of Rosberg and Hamilton followed," - This may sound better: "Mercedes teammates Rosberg and Hamilton followed,"
 Done
  • "Force India's Sergio Pérez managed only nine laps as he spent much of the session in the pits after smoke emerged from the rear of his car." - pits is slang and should be avoided, pit lane is better.
 Done
  • "Upon beginning his preparation laps for qualifying, Rosberg had to come back into the pits," - ditto.
 Done

Qualifying[edit]

  • fifty-second should be spelt in number form.
According to MOS:NUMERAL, fifty-second is acceptable.
  • "The two Red Bulls - Red Bull cars
 Done

Race[edit]

  • "When Vettel pitted on lap 16," -pitted is slang, rewrite to "made a pit stop"
 Done
  • "he emerged third behind the two Red Bulls," - as in the qualifying section, change to "Red Bull cars"
 Done
  • "By lap twenty," - should be spelt in number form for consistency.
 Done

References[edit]

  • No dead links

That is all I found. On hold until the issues have been addressed. Z105space (talk) 08:51, 14 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Z105space: Should be good to go. Thank you for another swift review! Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:33, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Zwerg Nase: I can now pass. Once again, good work! Z105space (talk) 19:46, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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