Talk:2023 Tour Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 19:37, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Lots of comma cleanup. It appears the list of century breaks and the site that had it went down and did not archive correctly, so you may need to find a different reference for this information. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:15, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

Copy changes

• (officially the 2023 Cazoo Tour Championship) Presumably a reference from another year that was not adjusted?
  • I'm not sure what you mean. We generally list the official name of the event in the lede. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:46, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

  @Lee Vilenski I meant that it says Cazoo here instead of Duelbits. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:27, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

• Allen won the first opening two frames making a break of 72 in the second, Comma after "frames" to complete the appositive
• before Ding tied the match at 2–2 making a century break in frame three Comma after 2–2
• Allen won frame five, however, Ding made three breaks of above 50 to lead by two frames, 5–3 after the first session.
  • First comma should be a semicolon to avoid a comma splice
  • Comma after 5–3 to complete the appositive
• Allen won frame 12 with a break of 65, but still trailed by five frames as Ding won frame 13. Remove comma: unneeded (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, CinS)
• Carter responded by making a break of 91 in frame six, and a 131 in frame seven. Remove comma
• Murphy then won the match 10–8 making a break of 128 in the final frame. Comma after 10–8
• This was Day's third competitive maximum break, and was the highest of the tournament. Remove comma (CinS)
• Day then won five of the next six frames to reduce Selby's lead to 9–7, before Selby won the match in the 17th frame after a break of 77. Remove comma (CinS)
• Hyphenate "four-frame" in "four frame lead"
• Ding won the next frame with a 86 break, before Wilson made his fourth century break of the session to lead 6–2. Remove comma (CinS)
• Wilson extended his lead to 9–3, after playing a shot too softly when attempting a seventh century break on 83. Remove comma (CinS)
• Wilson commented that having issues off the table being better had "freed the shackles" of his performance during the match. I'm trying to parse what the first half of the sentence means.
• Breaks of 46 and 71 gave Murphy a 6–4 lead, before Selby won the next two frames. Remove comma (CinS)
• Selby, however, won the next three frames to tie the scores, and force a deciding frame. Remove comma after "scores" (CinS)
• The final was contested between Murphy and Wilson, and officiated by Malgorzata Kanieska. Remove comma (CinS)
• Murphy led for the first time in the match as he won frame 13, and made a 115 to lead 8–6. Remove comma (CinS)
• Murphy made a break of 95 to lead 9–7, and won the match 10–7 by winning frame 17. Remove comma (CinS)
  • I shall go through the commas when next at a PC (it's easier with a big screen to get these done quickly. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:46, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

Spot checks

• 6: List of providers, no errors in article. Wonder if this list can be reduced in prominence in the article. Corrected a typo here that was in the source as well. Y
• 13: Eurosport report. Details check out. Y
• 17: World Snooker interview with Ding: "Winning the Six Red has given me confidence. It’s great to win a match like this." Y
• 27: BBC Selby/Day match report. Potting a free ball set up the 16-ball red and a break of 139, which reduced the deficit to 9-6 Y
• 45: The archive appears to not have worked correctly, and the entire domain is gone. This site reportedly is down now [1]. Is there an alternate source for this information?
  • Archive fixed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 06:06, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
    • Looks good, Lee Vilenski. Ping me when the comma fixes are done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:02, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
      • All done Sammi Brie, I'm no expert on grammar, so thanks for taking a look! Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:58, 15 August 2023 (UTC)

Earwig only flags an attributed quote.

Images

The tournament logo is NFUR. The photo of Ryan Day is CC-licensed. No issues. There is alt text for the body image but not the logo.

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