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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 06:06, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Toolserver updates about the album. There are redirects and dead links, please correct them first. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 06:09, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Are you working on this? —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 08:00, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I just realized about this... I don't have much time, but DivaKnockouts volunteered to help me on this . He will take care of all the issues :) — ΛΧΣ21 22:03, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

 Done — DivaKnockouts 22:26, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Starting with prose review, will be done in a few hours and before EOD. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 08:32, 15 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

*Produced by Arjona himself --> remove himself

  • Change the as well as to something like " Produced by Arjona, Dan Warner, Lee Levin and Puerto Rican singer-songwriter Tommy Torres../"
  • the album was recorded between the United States and Mexico --> the album was recorded in various studios between United States and Mexico
  • released --> release
  • If you are adding live quotes in the lead, it needs to be sourced.
  • from several countries in Latin America --> from several Latin American countries
  • Several singles --> Why not "Six singles"?
  • another major world tour --> missing info, other than Quinto Piso which is the major world tour?
  • Inconsistency between producers listed in the lead and that in the infobox
Done here. — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Background

*We are a label that has a major catalog of songwriters and quality pop and rock from the likes of Maná, Alejandro Sanz, Laura Pausini, and now, Arjona. --> rephrase to passive phrase, too many quotes in such a small para

  • He stated in an interview that the album's composition was inspired by that thought of trying to "recoup some of the freshness" of his previous releases --> Wrong construction. Try this "He stated in an interview that the inspiration behind the album was the thought of recouping some of the "freshness" of his previous releases.
  • all albums were result of evolution, as well as contradictions, which he celebrates as part of life --> Needs expansion, doesn't make sense what he meant.
Done here too! — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Composition
  • You are directly starting with the song name. There's no content regarding the composition, or recording info, or mixing or people working on it etc
This isn't required. — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

*remove the word "themed"

*El Del Espejo" includes lyrics influenced by the "self-criticism" --> What, who's where self-criticism?

*The singer commented that "She was to do her trials and 'tickled' --> Who's "she"? I thought Ricardo wa a man?

  • "Nadie Sabe A Donde Va" is inspired by the events occurred on 11 March 2004 in Madrid in the Atocha train station --> "Nadie Sabe A Donde Va" is inspired by the bombing which occured on 11 March 2004 in Madrid at the Atocha train station
  • La Vida Está De Luto" is inspired by the actual situation of the planet --> What situation?
  • The song was composed as to when heard, it "gives and immediate desire of drinking tequila" --> Firstly, doesn't make any sense, secondly who said that quote?
  • In an interview, not "On an interview"
  • Arjona talked about the collaboration with Paquita la del Barrio --> Arjona talked about the collaboration with Barrio (surnames only)
  • agreeing that he neither --> agreeing that he did not duet either
  • The conclusion of this para is abrupt and context less
Done — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Release

*which main sound is a piano --> and piano as the main sound

  • The song became a critical and commercial hit for the singer --> The song was a critical and commercial hit for the singer
  • No.2 --> No. 2 correct these numeric conventions throughout
  • I don't see mention of the fifth and sixth singles?
  • Arjona expressed interest in singing in Cuba, showing no political commitments for the matter, a clear reference of the event Colombian singer Juanes was planning on that country in 2009 --> What event? What political matter? No context again
Tried my best on the last one, otherwise the rest are done. — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Reception
  • How is Jason's review a positive one when you are saying that as per his review, his fans are going to be disappointed?
    • Again, how would the review be positive here?
      • Because, in the review he states Arjona's fans of his rock style will be disappointed. Not all of his fans. The overall review is positive, I'm taking as you haven't read it. — DivaKnockouts 16:45, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

*Regarding the Grammy nom, you can mention to whom he lost, just to complete the information.

  • Numerics correction
  • 5to Piso reached No.1 again, totalizing six weeks at that position. --> for a total of six weeks at the top (there's no word called totalizing)
  • What are the sources for retail sales of 200,000?
  • con that list?
Fixed all!! — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
References

*Billboard should be italicized, print media

  • Please check for the printed medias,I'm not sure about the Spanish sources
  • Many of these references do not have the "date=" parameter as in teh date in which they were written
  • Why is PROMUSICAE listed for Mexican charts instead of AMPROFON?
  • eltempo.com.ec, what is its reliability?
  • Ref 45 0 47, I'm pretty sure they are online sources, so why are they italicized? Please check this throughout the article
  • The PDF references need to have "format=PDF" included in the references
  • accessdate missing for some of them
Done. — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]


That's all for now, much to do in terms of prose. I'm not sure if the developer of this article is a native speaker of English, but the prose needs real work. On hold. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 15:40, 16 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All done! — DivaKnockouts 03:23, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No, all is not done, I can see initial problems from the lead pending, didn't even go through each and every point I made. I saw teh changes that you did and none of the prose issues were addressed. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 06:07, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
What!? I did go through each and every point you made. I addressed every prose issue the best I could as English is not my primary language. Are you sure you looked through each dif? — DivaKnockouts 13:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

As I pointed out above, some were missed or needed more expansion and is left non-struck. Just another thing, use WP:ACCESS for the tables like you have for the certification table. Then address the unresolved comments above and we are good to go. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 15:58, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed the issues. I will see if Hahc21 can use WP:ACCESS for the tables. — DivaKnockouts 16:45, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
 Done — DivaKnockouts 13:57, 23 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
They weren't done properly, I corrected them. I also noticed that the references in the release history section don't use the {{cite web}}. Please use teh template as it is recommended. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 14:14, 23 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
All done! :) — DivaKnockouts 15:06, 23 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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