Talk:A Crow Looked at Me/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 17:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Recorded no source and not in the body of the article.
So the album was recorded in astore and in a house? Which house? Who lives in the "house"?
Neds alt

Done

Done

Split the sections, one will be Background and the other compostion
the Canadian → Canadian
use MDY dates since it is an amrican artist
Julie Doiron, Sun Kil Moon and Karl Ove Knausgård → people are not familiar with these, it needs more depth
Elverum wrote the lyrics down longhand on her paper → He wrote the lyrics down longhand on her paper → what do you mean with her paper?
and that he made the record and released it → making and releasing the record in order to
Castrée's illness and death and Elverum's ensuing grief → Castrée's illness and death, and Elverum's ensuing grief
throughout, In regards → throughout. In regards
was quoted saying that → said
writer Molly Beauchemin wrote → writer Molly Beauchemin stated

Done

Audio sample needs to be reduced and comply with WP:SAMPLE, on top of that move it to the compostion section.
discounted → what do you mean?
Despite this he still found releasing the album → do you mean he still was fond of releasing the album?
"re-enter the world," → remove this
Elverum, Elverum, Elverum...→ reaplce some of it with he
Pitchfork never calls them single, but Paste and Stereogum do. Added these source or others as long as they call them singles. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:54, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Rename it to Critical Reception
The Professional ratings boxscore should come first
A Crow Looked at Me received widespread critical acclaim upon release. → full stop
"which Elverum found "reaffirming" although was frustrated by those who viewed it as a tribute." → after the critics perception
Consequence of Sound → Consequence of Sound's; Exclaim! → Exclaim!
Paste magazine → same as previous + wikilink Paste
Drowned in Sound, Tiny Mix Tapes → same as previous
X of, Y of, Z of → use the possisive form, use "from K magazine"...
Add more reviews.
Brian Roesler from which magazine? + since there is a full stop put the reference there and not after the Elverum comment. On top of that, remove the "A sentiment echoed by Elverum himself" statement as this is a critical recpetion section, add it to other section if you want. Regarding the Fan Reception it is quite bias, so remove it from here. Add to other topic if you want.

Done

Remove the pitchfork logo and add the quote to the text, same goes for metacritic
11th → eleventh
80th → eightieth
of all time → full stop
Very poor section, needs to re-write and add Year-end lists with positions and comments, as well as Decade-end lists.
was ranked in third position of → was the third on
"writing that "“Real Death” is a sign of love, one that can bring you to your knees even if you know exactly what's coming" → a critic with a name wrote this, not a magazine
expand this section writing what magazines said regardin the album, since there are a lot of them, just use the one's the it made the top 10.

Done

All tracks are written by Phil Elverum. → All tracks are written and produced by Phil Elverum + source?

Done

Same as previous
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between the credits and the personnel.
Isn't there one source, like liner notes?

Done

Done

Don't SHOUT in references
npr.org. → remove
Bandcamp, AllMusic, The Creative Independent
Reference 18, 19 and 20 are missing work
Dates are missing in source 1, 10 20, 50, and others
Vice source is looking weird
Reference 48 is missing work, same for 51, 54-57
"pwelverumandsun"?
The Portland Mercury → Portland Mercury
Now Toronto → Now (newspaper)
5 and 12 are the same source
One of the Paste magazine links is dead; "Mount Eerie Shares Deeply Personal "Real Death," Announces New Album A Crow Looked At Me"
Dates of the sources are all over the place, some use MDY format and other DMY format, use MDY dates since it is an american artist

Done

Do you need all this pictures? Geneviève Castrée, Gloria Graham, and the picture with the caption of "Soria Moria" references Elverum's time in a Norwegian cabin, in which he wrote his 2008 album Dawn" need to go, the caption keep on the article.
You can now address the issues I pointed out, once you are done with them let me know. You have one week, I will give you a chance of improving this.

All problems have been resolved as well as additions per my discretion. MarioSoulTruthFan DMT biscuit (talk) 11:45, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@DMT biscuit: and @Sparklism: left you various New comment, and a note on the infobox, address them. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:15, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]