Talk:Absolutely Sweet Marie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will get on with this now! --K. Peake 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Change Columbia Studio B to Columbia B in the infobox per the rules on the studio parameter
• "of the double album Blonde on Blonde, Dylan's seventh studio album, on June 20, 1966." → "of the double album and Dylan's seventh studio album, Blonde on Blonde (1966)." or something similar since the exact release date of the album is not notable
• Move the recording sentence to being the one after writing/production; follow it with the interpretation one
• Move the later inclusion to being after the total number of performances in the second para, followed finally by the cover version
• ""Absolutely Sweet Marie" was recorded at" → "It was recorded at"
• "Rolling Stone placed the track" → "Rolling Stone placed it" with the wikilink

• All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:09, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Background and recording

• You need to add Robbie Robertson's guitar playing to prose to warrant keeping the image

• Used the Kooper image here instead, with some commentary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• Merge the first and second paras per the overly short size

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• Where is the November 30 session sourced?

• Added Bjorner for 1965. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• Add a comma after Al Kooper
• "session musicians including" → "session musicians, including"
• "Wayne Moss and Kenneth Buttrey," → "Wayne Moss, and Kenneth Buttrey," with the pipe
• "initially on February 14." → "initially on February 14, 1966."
• "during the tenth album session," → "during the 10th album session," per MOS:NUM
• "which was released on June 20, 1966." → "on June 20, 1966." because included was already used
• Move the last para of this section to being in comp instead since that is what it focuses on
• "makes the track work."" → "makes the track work"." per MOS:QUOTE

• Amended per the eight points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Composition and lyrical interpretation

• Add the last para from the previous section at the start here; the instrumentation also should be mentioned in this section
• "that line does not appear" → "the line does not appear"
• "Journalist Paul Williams considered that" → "Journalist Paul Williams considers that"
• [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
• "and named "Absolutely Sweet Marie"" → "and names "Absolutely Sweet Marie""
• "fear of being misunderstood)."" → ""fear of being misunderstood)"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "from first to last."" → "from first to last"." per above
• Shouldn't you use the title rather than "Dylan's song"?
• "half sick/traffic" why is there a single quote mark to end this part but not one to start it?
• "out of key chord."" → "out of key chord"."

• Amended the article per the above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

• You should use a consistent past or present tense for the reviews here
• "highly distinctive rhythm."" → "highly distinctive rhythm"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "still felicitously possible."" → "still felicitously possible"." per above
• "The reviewer for" → "A reviewer for"
• "sparkling blues-rock guitar."" → "sparkling blues-rock guitar"."
• "Dylan said of the song" → "Dylan said of the song:"

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:27, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Live performances and other releases

• Looks good!

Personnel

• Remove the img per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE, especially when you have already used an image of another performer from this section
• Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey

• Done. I've changed the source, and the credits per that source. Sanders (2020) seems to be the best available. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:00, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

References

• Copyvio score looks decent at 39.8%
• Pipe Vanity Fair to Vanity Fair (magazine) on ref 7
• Add the work/website to ref 9
• Pipe Harper's to Harper's Magazine on ref 21
• Remove Downbeat from ref 22 and pipe Sun-Herald to The Sydney Morning Herald
• Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 26
• Wikilink Bowling Green State University Popular Press
• Pipe Carlton to Welbeck Publishing Group
• Wikilink Continuum International Publishing Group
• Wikilink Princeton University Press
• Wikilink Constable & Robinson
• Pipe Black Dog & Leventhal to Black Dog & Leventhal Publishers
• Pipe Bloomsbury Academic to Bloomsbury Publishing
• Wikilink New English Library
• Wikilink University of Illinois Press
• Wikilink Billboard Books per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Pop Matters → PopMatters with the wikilink
• Wikilink Omnibus Press

• All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:24, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

External links

• Looks good!

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed, after a quick review! --K. Peake 09:42, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• Many thanks, K. Peake. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:18, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• BennyOnTheLoose You have not added the instrumentation from personnel to prose like I was intending you to do with the suggestion. --K. Peake 21:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

• Apologies, K. Peake. I've now added that in. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:13, 29 November 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, this is laid out well after all! --K. Peake 11:37, 29 November 2022 (UTC)