Talk:All Saints' Church, Southampton/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:58, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
Hi! Will review. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:58, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- We typically do not keep citations in the lead unless we make some significant claims. Make sure you have added them all in the main text (after the lead).
- Slightly expand the lead.
History[edit]
- Henry II granted the land to the monks of St. Denys Priory Let this not look like a continuation from the lead. It would be good to say "the land on which the All Saints' Church stood" or the like.
- Add a word on who Henry II was.
- Ref. 1 can be added directly to the end of the 3rd line it is the source for.
- in the Spring of 1792 Why is it "S" and not "s"?
- and work begun on its replacement I would like to begin a new sentence from here.
- The latter paras are short and many, giving the article a choppy look. Can we combine a few of them, or use subsections?
- That is better, but the paras of "History" are also many and short. Can we have a similar solution for this? Sainsf <^>Feel at home 11:06, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
- and went on to become Bishop of Killaloe and Kilfenora, Bishop of Down and Connor and subsequently Bishop of Down, Connor and Dromore Appears irrelevant to the article.
- Yes, better! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 11:06, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
- The church building was subsequently demolished When?
- Good question! It's proved difficult to find a source that provides an answer. Most sources state or imply the building was destroyed in the 1940 bombing but source #1 says "in August 1944, with demolition of the ruin awaited...", indicating there was more demolition to be done. But I can't find a source that states when that work was done. I've adjusted the sentence in the article to be clear it's the ruins that were demolished; most of the building was already gone.
- Hmm... We should not venture into any guessing then. Can we add a few words so that it is clear to the reader that we do not know the date for certain? Sainsf <^>Feel at home 11:06, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
Exterior[edit]
- Who was Reveley?
- Because the north side adjoined the neighbouring buildings it had no windows "It had no windows because the north side adjoined the neighbouring buildings".
- Exterior and Interior sections could be combined into a single section, Architecture.
Sources[edit]
- Is "find a grave" a reliable source?
- The Internet archive source is not properly formatted. Firstly, it is a journal volume, so use Template:Cite journal. You will need to specify the article you refer to and its page range in this.
- Page range for ref. 11?
- You need to fill more parameters of Template:Cite book for ref. 2
That should be it. These done, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 16:45, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
- Many thanks Sainsf, hopefully I've now address those to your satisfaction. WaggersTALK 10:48, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks Waggers for your friendly response. We have only a little bit to go. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 11:06, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
- Awesome Waggers! I believe the article is ready for promotion. Great job! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:48, 8 April 2016 (UTC)