Jump to content

Talk:Ancient Greek funerary vases

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Untitled

[edit]

Hi Lawrence, you have a good start to your article. I think you could talk more about the different types of motifs and decorations on the geometric vases and how they influence the type of vase or its purpose as a funerary vase. I think you could delve in further to the death and funerary aspect of these vases and their purpose within funerary rituals. You're article is coming along though, keep going! Sunniobrien (talk) 21:09, 14 November 2017 (UTC)Sunni O'Brien[reply]

Comments from Prof. Paga

[edit]

Hi Lawrence - this is a solid start to your article. In addition to Sunni's comments, here are a few of my own suggestions.

  • You need to integrate citations throughout. You currently have several unsubstantiated claims, including that the Eastern influence of the symposium, the presence of holes in the bottoms of kraters, and the use of funerary imagery to console mourners. All of these (and more) need citations to a clear source.
  • Why include such an extensive discussion of the kylix, including how it's made? What does this have to do with funerary vessels? Kylikes are not one of the main types of funerary vessels you mention in the header, so their inclusion here is confusing.
  • Another vessel that should be included is the lekythos. There is already a Wikipedia page for this vessel, so link to it but don't spend too much time repeating info about it on your own page.
  • Why is there so much discussion of tragedy in the final paragraph? I do not see the connection back to funerary vessels. This section needs to be rethought, perhaps removed or expanded to make the connections clear.

Jpaga (talk) 18:18, 1 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]