Talk:Andrew Knapp/GA1
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 02:06, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
Review[edit]
- This is a rough review, will be adding on
Early life[edit]
- Please cite birthday under "early life"
Knapp was born in Roseville, California. He attended Granite Bay High School in Granite Bay, California
can be combined into one sentence:Knapp was born in Roseville, California and attended Granite Bay High School in Granite Bay, California
.- Please add more information about his family (such as his mother inspired his pitching) and move it to early life
- Here are some more sources: [1]
- Please add more information about his family (such as his mother inspired his pitching) and move it to early life
- I will re-review this section after the additions are made
Minor leagues[edit]
- I don't see the 2013 contract in the sources (but I found one for you [2])
- Please try and find a news source for MiLB.com Organization All Star
Personal life[edit]
- Please write when they were married (November 3, 2018)
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Thanks for taking on this review. I think I have caught up to all of your comments here. Ready for more whenever you are. Go Phightins! 16:14, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
- Go Phightins!, thanks for the quick response! Please excuse my lack of baseball knowledge as I continue the review. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:16, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
- Not a worry at all. Do feel free to flag any jargon that seems out of place. Ideally, the article should be accessible to all readers, and at minimum sports fans such as yourself (at least if your userpage is any indication
). Go Phightins! 16:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
- AHHHH, we edit conflicted and I lost my review!!! My fault for not saving it.
- Not a worry at all. Do feel free to flag any jargon that seems out of place. Ideally, the article should be accessible to all readers, and at minimum sports fans such as yourself (at least if your userpage is any indication
- SBNation isn't reliable, please replace it
- Ref #18 needs publisher
- Please move ref #7 to
He signed with the Phillies for a $1,033,100 signing bonus
- Found some refs to expand his rookie season [3] (all listed here)
- Please make sure all the dates in refs are uniformed (they should either be 9-11-20 or September 11, 2020)
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: I believe I handled all of these too. Thanks for snagging some of those newspaper clips. A few were already in the article (Philadelphia Daily News and Philadelphia Inquirer were published by same parent company, so sometimes the same article appears in slightly different forms), but I added a couple too. Go Phightins! 17:29, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
- Go Phightins!, it's been a pleasure working with you. Passing this article now. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:43, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
Thanks very much. Likewise! Go Phightins! 02:01, 10 April 2021 (UTC)