Talk:Architecture in modern Scotland/GA1
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Reviewer: Adam Cuerden (talk · contribs) 19:12, 17 July 2013 (UTC)
Well, let me start by saying this is a magnificent article, and most of my criticism is going to be of the "this would enhance it somewhat" type.
First of all, the article would normally be well-illustrated, but for such a sweeping article, it might be worth considering more images, and a gallery at the end, so that more of the examples discussed can be easily seen.
Now, you need not listen to any of this, but in my opinion:
- "Glasgow school" could use at least one more picture. This can easily be done by left-aligning one. Either another of Mackintosh's, or an example of one of the people he influenced.
- "Early modernism" could, likewise, use one or two more examples. In particular, a couple early council houses would help, to compare with the brutalist ones.
- "Post-war brutalism" might benefit from a picture of Cumbernauld.
- "Post-modern architecture" could really sue a few more images. I'd suggest the Causewayside house of the National Libraries of Scotland, myself, as a nice example mentioned in the article.
Two minor notes: "Render" isn't a particularly well-known term. I put a [clarification needed] on it, so that you could link to Cement render or stucco, as appropriate for that council block. I've seen both. "post-Coia", in the last section, might need a little more clarification (as may "Mackintosh", for that matter): people may have forgotten who they are. I've wikilinked them for now.
I've made a number of small copyedits; I would suggest reviewing them, to make sure no changes in meaning occured.
Whilst one small point remains open, and some improvements are suggested, this is clearly a good article, and well on its way to FA. ✓ Pass. Adam Cuerden (talk) 19:22, 17 July 2013 (UTC)