Talk:Baby, It's OK/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:27, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

I don't know if you have to necessarily link "Follow Your Instinct" to the other Wikipedia, but if it's not an issue with you I wouldn't worry about it
"and Romanian recording artist Alexandra Stan" --> "featuring Romanian recording artist Alexandra Stan"
"portrays" --> perhaps "is" instead?
"generally acclaimed" --> Sounds a bit too positive; there was a fairly mixed review mentioned below–change to "well received"?
"Germanic territories" --> Shouldn't it be "European countries" ?
"near a pool or the sea shore" --> "near a body of water"
"Follow Your Instinct also made various appearances for media and television." --> In regards to what?

Background and composition

The first sentence technically shouldn't be in quotation marks since the original text is in a different language; I also don't understand what this sentence is trying to get across
"Recording took place before Stan's alleged June 2013 physical altercation with her then-manager, Marcel Prodan, over compensation, which caused controversy in her native country.[2][3]" --> This seems pretty trivial to the article's importance

Saved some of the information though, because it's a little bit important due to the recording stuff. Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:35, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Viper and Lionezz have appearances throughout track." --> What types of appearances?

Not stated in the source, sorry. Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:35, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

"delivered" --> Remove
"German magazine Klatsch-Tratsch described the recording to include "anthemic melodies, crisp beats and an extra portion 'eye candy'", while labelling Stan a "pop princess".[9]" --> I feel like this would be better fit in the above section instead
"Commercially, "Baby, It's OK" was moderately successful in Germanic territories." --> Same thing as mentioned in the lead above
"top one hundred" --> "top hundred"
"managed to open" --> Doesn't sound right
"exciting" --> "exiting"

Promotion

"confessed" --> "expressed" sounds better in my opinion
"bikini" --> "bikinis"
"Jonathan Currin generally praised the visual" --> His review seems fairly mixed to me; he starts off negatively but then becomes more positive as the review progresses
"Pure Charts" redirects to "PureMédias"
Bravo needs to be italicized

ON HOLD to allow for necessary changes to be made. Good luck. Carbrera (talk) 01:39, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Thank you for the review; All has been done or commented on. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:45, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]