Talk:Back to Basics: Live and Down Under/GA1

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Reviewer: Вик Ретлхед (talk · contribs) 23:16, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Notes
  • the fourth video release→the fourth video album
  • was released for purchase→can you provide a luckier solution?
  • at 10 PM; this seems sufficient in the intro, however it should stay in the "Background" section
  • unlink studio album (common word)
  • included material
  • territories→countries
  • first-week→first week
  • features several bonus contents; is it bonus tracks or something else? "Contents" seems like a wide subject.
  • as well as→and
  • which would have opening acts such as The Pussycat Dolls and Danity Kane.→you can slightly re-word this sentence
  • the tour was filmed and was released as a DVD→the concert was filmed and released as a DVD.
  • video made it premiere→had its premiere or premiered on VH1
  • drop "television channel"
  • was first released officially→was officially released
  • A day later→the next day or one day later
  • remove CD Universe description since it's a music seller, not a professional publication (not to mention that the text is unauthorized)
  • "damn good" rating? 7/10 would be more appropriate and neutral
  • In Australia, the DVD debuted and peaked at number 2 on the ARIA Music DVD Chart on February 25, 2008 and remained on its peak for two weeks→The DVD was released on February 25, 2008 in Australia. It debuted and peaked at number 2 on the ARIA Music DVD Chart, where it stayed for two weeks.
  • reached it peak→reached its peak
  • and remained on the top ten for on week→and remained in the top ten for one week.
  • In the following week, it fell to number 3.→It fell to number 3 the following week.
  • re-build the "Certifications" section so that the actual shipments can be viewed (see Youthanasia for example)
  • might add a link to Discogs at the "External links" section
  • you should take another look at the prose since there are some other minor mistakes I haven't listed
You can mark the things you've addressed with  Done. Good luck.--Вик Ретлхед (talk) 19:03, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Since there is no feedback from the nominator in nearly a week, and since the GA waiting list is way too long, I'm closing the nomination as failed.--Вик Ретлхед (talk) 23:42, 5 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]