Talk:Back to December/GA1

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Reviewer: Novice7 | Talk 07:59, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Really good! Here are some issues:-

Link country pop, singer-songwriter? Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The song was written entirely.. — not "entirely", but "solely". Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Upon released as a promotional single — "Upon its release as a promotional single", would be better. Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
although neither has confirmed nor denied these allegations — neither of whom? Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The song was a "big" success in United States — try "The song was successful in 'the' United States.." Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Swifts performed 'Back to December'" in a series.. — "Swift has performed.." typo "Swifts" → "Swift". And series? Remove "series of" and add some other word instead of series. Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Back to December addresses a first for Swift, in that she had never apologized to someone in a song before. — reword.

I reworded it into ""Back to December" is an apology to a former lover in the form of a song, something that she has never done before"

Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"According to Swift, the lyrics were written as an apology to a former boyfriend, commenting.." — Split the sentence after comma. Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Based in certain aspects of the song's lyrics, like the time line and some physical descriptions — I didn't get that.

Already reworded into : "Based from the lyrics, critics have speculated that ..."

Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe you should re-title it to "Background and release" Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"the other song is Haunted" — change to 'the other being "Haunted". Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
You typed "apologize" here, but in Background it is "apologise". Be consistent.

I changed it and used "apologize".

Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lyrically, it is about somebody who was incredible to her, just perfect to her in a relationship, and she was really careless with him, so these are the words that she would say to him that he deserves to hear. — change that sentence.. Seems there are too much commas. Try splitting. Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"the song's couplets" — needs a "writing" or "noting" after couplets.

I paraphrased the sentence.

Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Out of five.

Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

praised repeats. Try "complimented" or "lauded" Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Entertainment Weekly review was already mentioned in Composition. Remove that. Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"number six on the Billboard Hot 100 due to of sales of" — due to "of"? Remove "of". Also, maybe "Billboard Hot 100 with sales of"? Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
A comma is needed after downloads on Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
In its sixth week, it has climbed to number forty-three — Maybe, "the song has since reached a position of number forty-three"? Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Internationally, the song "has" moderate success — "has"? Maybe "has had" Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
a "the" is needed before Canadian Hot 100 Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Swift first performed "Back to December" on October 18, 2010, in Paris at a showcase — rearrange . First venue, then date. Done
"set to release on the October.." — "set for release on October.." Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Next sentence also same as first. First event, then details. Like, "Swift performed the song on (the event's name), (details like what is it), which was streamed... Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Swift also performed Back to December on several occasions. — "on several other occasions". Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"as B+ in the Los Angeles Times" — "a B+ by the Los Angeles Times". Also, not "noted", but "noting" Done — MyDecember ^(talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Is it a mashup or a medley?