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Reviewer: Amadscientist (talk) 12:53, 3 March 2011 (UTC) This article will be reviewed shortly.--Amadscientist (talk) 12:53, 3 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In order to pass a GA nomination the article must meet the following standards:

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
  1. B. MoS compliance:
  1. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
  1. B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
  1. C. No original research:
  1. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
  1. B. Focused:
  1. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  1. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  2. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
  1. B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  1. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

Reviewer notes: This article is not ready for GA status at this time. Too small an editing history in the last month to see giving a hold with this much work. If editors return and work is accomplished, please resubmit and notify reviewer.

  • Lede does not reflect article content well and has repetitive wording.
  • Section headers should not reflect the subject per MoS. "Writing the speech" - "Summery of speech" headings can be assumed to be about the subject unless otherwise indicated. Other heading are longer than are needed.
  • The article misses a major issue, what the speech is about. The "history", "Origin" or "Background" to provide a clear understanding of why the speech was made is missing and should be above all sections.
  • There are 30 references in this article...but not a single reference or inline citation in the entire "Summary" section.
  • The body of the article suffers from the same repetitive wording of the lede. Use of the same phrases read badly.
  • The sections "Domestic response" and "International response" needs copy editing. They are basically lists of reviews separated as individual short paragraphs and require tightening and prose to add context.
  • While the article has a few negative mentions, over all it does not read in a neutral manner. Comes across almost idealistic. This may be cleaned up with copy editing and further research.

Overall the prose is quite poor and a great deal of referencing is required. A change in tone to be more neutral and encyclopedic is also very much needed. The fact that the article skips the issue of background or origin concerns me a great deal. This, of course could be linked to the main article on the subject of the speech itself.--Amadscientist (talk) 14:57, 3 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm surprised this article was nominated for GA. I was thinking about renominating for deletion in the future, once the recentism has worn off. – Muboshgu (talk) 13:53, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]