Talk:Basketball (The Office)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 05:29, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this one soon (remember it being an enjoyable episode). Ruby 2010/2013 05:29, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Article is stable, no deadlinks or DABS that need fixing
Can probably cut "Michael eventually tells the office that they don't have to come in on Saturday either." out of the lead (too much detail)
"where Michael takes about" Talks?
The first paragraph of the plot section could do with some rewriting (not a fan of all the parenthesizes)
Some tense issues in that section (Michael would food around -> Michael fools around) for instance. Bring it all to present tense
No need to say Greg Daniels every time you mention him (Daniels is sufficient). Same for other actors (Krasinski especially)
____ later ____ - A lot of repetition in the production's first and third paragraphs
"that the American version of The Office" Italicize The Office
The inspiration was a deleted scene? (not a delete scene)
"talks about a pick-up basketball game" What is a pick-up basketball game? I'm not sure if a word is missing, or if my confusion is stemming from my general ignorance of the sport
Typo: "several of their others pilots"
"Donald Lee Harris designed the warehouse set, a set Krasinski described" -> "Donald Lee Harris designed the warehouse set, which Krasinski described"
Wikilink hockey
The reviews section could definitely use some expanding; either flesh out what the reviewers said or find a few others
Typos: "retained 92% or its lead-in audience." and "gave the episode and 7.5 out of 10"
Use consistent date formatting for refs

Otherwise the article looks good. Very nice use of the audio commentaries. Will place the article on hold for seven days. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 19:26, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for reviewing this, and thanks for the kind words. I believe I've addressed all the issues.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:28, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Your changes look great. Fantastic job improving the article from an ugly stub into its current state. I'm glad the series' older articles are getting some love; I'd like to improve more season three episodes when I have time. Pass for GA! Ruby 2010/2013 03:38, 3 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]