Talk:Battle of Balikpapan (1945)/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 09:28, 26 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]


This article is in good shape. I have some comments:

  • To the first sentence, I suggest adding ", the campaign to liberate Japanese-held British and Dutch Borneo" with links
  • comma after Operation Oboe Two
  • delete "on the island of Borneo" as it has now been introduced earlier
  • perhaps mention the Japanese commander when their numbers are mentioned
  • "well-developed"
  • link Balikpapan, Samarinda
  • how had "the airfield had been badly damaged"? bombing or naval shelling, or both?
  • one degrees south
  • high at between 74–93 percent
  • the July to September period or drop the "the"
  • the entire European population was executed? How many?
    • Costello didn't say, but I've found a newspaper article that provides a total of between 80 and 100. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • could you convert oil barrels? And was this an annual total?
  • facilities by an estimated 40 percent
  • full stop after Noemfoor
  • The first two raids initially suffered heavy losses
  • and inflictinged minimal damage
  • is "mainly by Australian troops in New Guinea" fair given the Guadalcanal campaign?
  • link Coastal artillery and Anti-tank trench
  • by this stage I believe 1st Armoured Regiment was an AIF unit, not Militia
  • U.S. vs US, I think the key is consistency per MOS:US
  • link escort carrier and torpedo boat
  • suggest "mainly from the 672nd and 727th Amphibian Tractor Battalions and the 593rd Engineer Boat and Shore Regiment"
  • move link to booby trap to first mention
  • comma after Lieutenant Colonel Tom Daly
  • "was made during the throughout the morning"
  • did the tanks capture Hill 87, of was it infantry supported by tanks?
  • company-assault→company assault
  • suggest "were lavishly provided"
  • more so than in any other
  • link Flamethrower and Mortar (weapon)
  • be consistent with measurements, either imperial or metric first throughout
  • in general, during the fighting, is information available about what Japanese units were being fought in each area?
    • Not much detail that I can find, although I have clarified the situation a little further. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • when it took over from the 18th Brigade
  • Meanwhile, Ppatrols
  • link David Horner
  • I see that militarily the operation was dubious, but is there any discussion of the political aspects of the operation in terms of the early reinstatement of Dutch control of a significant oil production area?

Just the image review to go. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:33, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • OK, that was pretty easy. Images and copyvio check all good. Just placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:42, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • @Peacemaker67: G'day, PM, thanks for taking a look at this. I have made the following changes based on your comments above: [1]. Please let me know what you think of these. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      • This is now in great shape, I hope to see it at ACR soon. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:12, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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