Talk:Battle of Byram's Ford/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

Nice work on this one. A few comments:

• Something weird going on with the lead being below the TOC...
  • Fixed
• Could you put an image in the infobox?
  • Done. I'd like to use File:Battle of the Blue by Benjamin D. Mileham.jpg, but I can't unfortunately because it may not be proveably PD
• suggest reducing the {{TOC limit}} to 3
  • Done (I think)

Lead

• say what state it happened in in the first sentence
  • Done
• link Union forces to Union Army
  • Done
• Part of Price's fordce
  • Done, as well as fixing a tense switch later in the same sentence
• "of Brigadier General Joseph O. Shelby's"
  • Done
• "above the Union defenses at Byram's Ford"
  • Done
• "Pleasonton broke through Marmaduke's position at Potato Hill"
  • Done

Body

• suggest "The invasion was designed to start"→"It was hoped that the invasion would start"
  • Done
• link infantry for infantrymen
  • I've already linked infantry in the last paragraph of the previous section; I'm not sure that the duplink would be necessary here
• I would reorganise the explanation of the Confederate divisions in the order the commanders are named
  • Done
• link militia
  • Done
• active military movementoperations
  • Done
• "Sanborn commanded the unitformation"
  • Done
• who was William Fishback?
  • Glossed (a militia officer)
• "would not permit the Kansas State Militia from movingto move further east"
  • Done
• "Confederate troops attacked the rear guard"
  • Done
• "a feint attack on the northern part"
  • Done
• "while forcing his way across the river"
  • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 12:41, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

• "Union skirmishers back across the Big Blue" the 2nd Colorado Cavalry?
  • Source doesn't identify the troops
• "the 2nd Colorado Cavalry reported"
  • Done
• suggest "two units from his brigade – Nichols's Missouri Cavalry Regiment and Schnable's Missouri Cavalry Battalion – to reinforce Thompson."
  • Done
• "Colonel B. Frank Gordon and thehis 5th Missouri Cavalry Regiment"
  • Done
• did the ford where Gordon crossed have a name? Was his crossing opposed at all?
  • Neither Lause, Collins, Sinisi, Kirkman, or Monnett name the ford, so probably not. Added that the crossing occurred without incident.
• "prevented from moving north by the Confederates" Slayback's battalion?
  • Source doesn't explicitly say this, referring to the Confederates who had poured through Hinkle's Ford
• "but Moonlight failed todid not get the order" it is hardly a failure of Moonlight if he didn't get a message
  • Reworded, as possibly causing an indication of failure on Moonlight's part. "Failed to get/receive the order" is acceptable AmEng for when someone doesn't receive something even with no fault, though
• "but was arrived at Hinkle's Ford"
  • Done
• "so he sent Jackman's brigade to the south"?
  • Done
• "way to Westport,; and Shelby" as there is internal punctuation within the latter two parts of the sentence
  • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:52, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

• the header should read "October 23: Pleasonton crosses the river"
  • Corrected
• "further to the west on a height known as Potato Hill" should say approx how far from the river, as it later becomes clear that it is only a short distance
  • Done
• comma after "Battery H, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
  • Added
• "Jackman withdrew from beforein the face of Sanborn's brigade."
  • Done
• comma after "Battery L, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
  • Added
• "Lause estimagtes"
  • Corrected
• Note c. "Potato Hill was renamed to Bloody Hill after the battle"
  • Done

The images are appropriately licensed. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Nice job thus far. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:03, 19 June 2021 (UTC)

• • @Peacemaker67: - Replied to all points made so far. I'm hoping to run this one through ACR and maybe eventually FAC. Hog Farm _Talk 03:36, 22 June 2021 (UTC)
    • This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by a maps and photographs with acceptable licensing and appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:08, 22 June 2021 (UTC)