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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:50, 31 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Coming soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:50, 31 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • in the 1960s, due to his → remove comma
  • both efforts spearheaded by Charters → both efforts being spearheaded by Chaarters
  • practitioners of the blues → remove "blues"
  • is also highly praised → which was highly acclaimed

Infobox

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  • For genres, occupations and instruments, use a flat list.
  • 1920s-1945 → 1920s–1945

Biography

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Early life and career

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  • instrument: a cigar → instrument—a cigar
  • Little else seems to be known about Johnson's childhood but at some point → While few other information is known about the singer's childhood, he met another blind musician at some point named...

Recording sessions

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  • evangelist with "remarkable → evangelist with a "remarkable
  • most established → most-established
  • best exemplifies his unique guitar playing in regular tuning in Open D for slide → place "best" at the end of the sentence
  • and according to Harris he → and—according to Harris—he
  • according to Johnson biographer → according to Johnson's biographer
  • spectating Johnson perform → spectating Johnson performing
  • journeyed to Atlanta with Harris → add comma before "with Harris"
  • in 1932; however, Johnson → in 1932, but Johnson

Later life and death

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  • of that cemetery → of the cemetery

Musical style

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  • Sam Charters in the liner notes to the compilation album The Complete Blind Willie Johnson wrote Johnson, in fact, was → Sam Charters wrote in the liner notes of his compilation album The Complete... that, in fact, Johnson was
  • Johnson's style: "opposed → Johnson's style as being "opposed
  • Johnson also delivered in his → Johnson also delivered vocals in his

Legacy

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  • was included because, according to Sagan → was included, as—according to Sagan—

References

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  • Please change the style into {{reflist|2}}

Outcome

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AWESOME article!! You did a fantastic job on it ! I've put this  On hold to allow fine-tuning edits on the page before passing to GA. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:00, 3 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Cartoon network freak thank you for the review. I made the changes as asked, but I have questions about the last two alterations you suggest in the lead. Shouldn't the "blues" be kept in the sentence so readers know specifically what Johnson was a "practioner" of? Also, could you re-read your fourth recommendation because I read it over and over, and it just does not make sense to me in the sentence. Other than that, I am happy to say I like how the article turned out, especially when I consider the shape it was in not too long ago. Thank you again!TheGracefulSlick (talk) 23:43, 3 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
TheGracefulSlick Hi there again! In the first case, I just wanted to say that you should remove overfluous "the", but I have made a mistake by writing "blues" instead. My fourth recommendation is meant to be a better solution for saying that his work was "praised", but if you think your is better, then just keep it;) Finally, I'm gladly passing this AWESOME article, and I'm going to fix the problem with "the" before enlisting this. Best regards and congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:41, 4 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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