Talk:British logistics in the Siegfried Line campaign/GA1
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Reviewer: Eastfarthingan (talk) · Eastfarthingan (talk) 16:39, 6 June 2021 (UTC)
- Eastfarthingan, I notice this is your first GA review. Thanks for volunteering to help with the backlog. I'm an experienced GA reviewer so feel free to ask me any questions you might have. (t · c) buidhe 04:23, 7 June 2021 (UTC)
- Hello (t · c) buidhe The article has been combed and nitpicked and I'm satisfied with the resulting actions taken by Hawkeye & by myself - would you be happy for me to pass this nomination? Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:05, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
Fantastic article to be reviewed over the week. Eastfarthingan (talk) 16:39, 6 June 2021 (UTC)
Comments[edit]
- Any chance of coming up with a short conclusion in the lead with regards to an assessment on British logistics in this period?
- In the background I've noticed that a flow of sentences need to be equal to each other. Some sentences are too short The bulk of the German forces were drawn towards the British sector While this sentence needs a couple of breaks. When the American Operation Cobra, launched on 25 July, succeeded in breaking through the German defences, six additional transport companies were shipped from the United Kingdom although there was already more than sufficient transport resources in the lodgement area in order to support a rapid advance, and plans were drawn up to establish an advanced base in the Le Havre area on the assumption that if the Germans were forced back from the Seine, they would try to establish a new front along the Somme
- Not sure this sentence is relevant or if it is could it be expanded? To soften the blow to the British public, the Prime Minister of the United Kingdom, Winston Churchill, announced Montgomery's promotion to field marshal on the same date. What blow would that have been?
- It is just there simply to state Montgomery's rank. Some clever re-wording could remove it. I lifted the text from another article. As to the blow, that could be expanded into an entire article in its own right, but in a nutshell: Britain had been at war longer, had a self-image of being a great power although the reality was fading fast, and had a political need to adopt a high profile to ensure a say in the post-war world order. The British public had been through a lot with rationing and the blitz and all, read newspapers that touted the exploits of their troops and commanders, and regarded Montgomery as a national hero and a military messiah. This had operational and logistical implications, with the British Army occupying the seaborne flank. Partly this was the traditional British preoccupation with the sea, but it meant that the 21st Army Group had more experienced logistics staffs, and much easier logistics because it was advancing towards the ports. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:40, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- On 16 September, eight American truck companies began running between Bayeux and Brussels to build up stocks for two American airborne divisions. Is this the Red Ball express or something separate to it?
- No, it is the so-called Red Lion express. It delivered supplies for the US airborne divisions. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:40, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- Ok would it be better to place that term in the sentence/paragragh? Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:17, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- No, it is the so-called Red Lion express. It delivered supplies for the US airborne divisions. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:40, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- In the Ports section - I think there should be wikilinks to the capture of the ports of Dieppe, Le Havre, Bolougne, Calais - they all have operational names too. eg Operation Undergo.
- The repairs done in Calais, Boulogne, Le Havre etc - were these done by the Canadians, British or French. There is the mention of the Royal Engineers in regard to Ostend. Eastfarthingan (talk) 15:06, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- The port of Antwerp was opened to coasters that day and to and deep-draught shipping on 28 November. Looks like the sentence is missing a few words?
- Scheldt Dredging Control organisation was established & Some 1,031,000 cubic yards (788,000 m3) was dredged - I take it this is a Royal Navy unit & not 21st army group?
- military labour had to be brought in. Was this from 21st army group itself?
- Antwerp repeatedly failed to meet its tonnage targets. was this because of the V-weapon attacks or some other cause?
Partly, but the main problem was difficulty clearing the tonnage received. Added: "
- and mines laid by sank 67,626 deadweight tons (68,711 deadweight tonnes) more. - a missing word here?
- 222 3-ton (3.4 m3) lorries, 12 10-ton (11 m3) lorries and 36 tippers. Can any of these types of lorries be named eg Bedford, Chevrolet?
- They were drawn from the Anti-Aircraft Command and command mixed transport units. Duplicate word?
- Five arrived by 26 September. Five came pre-loaded with petrol, five with supplies, and two came empty. Are these companies?
- Road and railway traffic began more routine during October, Missing word?
- How many locomotives did the British ship over? I've just added another type that was used.
- 21st Army Group had made little use of resupply by air during the Normandy campaign, with the exception of the Polish 1st Armoured Division in August. Perhaps could expand a little on this? Would be interesting to see why this formation utilised air transport more than any other in 21st AG.
- Got themselves cut off during Operation Totalize, but the whole thing is outside the scope of the article. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
- Second paragraph of Air section; were the RAF conducting all the flights?
- Sorry to be picky - when starting another sub heading would you be happy to give full names of abbreviations again eg FMC, POL, DID in the 1st few paragraphs where relevant?
- MOS:1STABBR: Write out both the full version and the abbreviation at first occurrence. I can use the {{abbr}} to create a mouse-over. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
- 'The working pipelines failed on 3 October' was this because of the storm?
- and the 21st Army Group Best to remove 'the'.
- Ok acknowledged.
- and foods impregnated with garlic, Perhaps reword this?
- During the advance in September and October, the two armies.. These being 1st Canadian & 2nd British?
- and four of the forestry companies had to be used as infantry just a comment here- this sounds incredible. Would love more detail but perhaps in another article.
- Nos. 1, 9, 14, 25 and 27 Canadian Forestry Companies had been operating sawmills south-east of Names, in the St. Hubert area, and No. 16 Canadian Forestry Company at Spa, south-east of Liege, as part of the Canadian 7th Forestry District. (The four companies of the Canadian 8th Forestry District operated under the 21st Army Group.) They became caught up in the German offensive and held part of the front for a time. They were withdrawn to Brussels and had to abandon 21 sawmills. By the end of the year the ten companies had produced 8,949,659 board feet (21,118.84 m3) of sawn timber. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:18, 16 June 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks. That is fascinating! That is definitely something for Mark Felton productions to make a video about. Eastfarthingan (talk) 21:23, 16 June 2021 (UTC)
- The Ardennes offensive prompted a request from the US Communications Zone on 26 December for an emergency delivery of 351 Sherman tanks clarify if this is to 21st Army Group?
- The rate of hospital admissions rose from 22.4 per 1,000 personnel in October to 24.3 in November, and 28.0 in December. Was this becasue of the cold weather, casualties or disease? Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:03, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
- and over 1,0000 camps were built for anti-aircraft battery and searchlight positions. extra 0 there? Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:03, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
- their work was hampered by the shortage of coal and the availability of timber. Reason for this? Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:03, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
- The outcome of how successful the logistics of the Siegrfied Line campaign could be explained. This may benefit from the conclusion in the lead to be expanded here in more detail - if possible. Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:03, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
- Just a couple of final points: might be worth mentioning about British manpower shortage at this time somewhere in the article. Eastfarthingan (talk) 15:17, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
- This leads to the second point where supplies in the Italian campaign were subject to some shortage (manpower particularly) - Brian Robertson the Chief Administrative Officer at AFHQ struggled with ammunition shortages, it was so severe that rationing was introduced and offensives were put off until Spring 1945. This is mentioned in Maintenance in the Field, Volume II: 1943–1945. Might be worth mentioning this in terms of how this campaign (Normandy including) had adverse affects on others like Italy. Eastfarthingan (talk) 15:17, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
- Added. Do you have this book? It is very rare, and it took me a long time to find my copy. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:45, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
- Sadly not I picked this from Brian Robertson's wiki article which mentions this in detail. Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:05, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
- The article has been combed and nitpicked, and I'm satisfied with the final results I'm happy to pass it - just waiting on a response from experienced GA reviewer Buidhe to see how my first GA review has gone. Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:05, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
Double-check by Buidhe[edit]
- Eastfarthingan, I think you did a great job reviewing this article and giving feedback to improve it. However, there are some aspects of the GA criteria that aren't mentioned in this review. For example, I don't see any mention of evaluating either text or media for copyright issues. I would try to mention each aspect of the criteria in your review; one easy way to avoid missing any of them is using one of the GAN templates. I can also help with any of the more technical aspects (image copyright can be tricky, although Hawkeye is usually very good at using free images). (t · c) buidhe 20:07, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you for your advise Buidhe, I will list those from the templates soon. Eastfarthingan (talk) 20:19, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
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- Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:23, 21 June 2021 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
Now you need to follow the instructions on how to pass an article. (WP:GAN/I#PASS) Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:50, 21 June 2021 (UTC)
- Done. Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:11, 22 June 2021 (UTC)