Talk:British logistics in the Western Allied invasion of Germany/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 14:54, 24 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:54, 24 November 2022 (UTC)

@Sturmvogel 66: Any updates? Onegreatjoke (talk) 15:51, 9 December 2022 (UTC)

• Images appropriately licensed
• Capitalize Bren

  Y Capitalised. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:15, 15 December 2022 (UTC)

• A fair number of duplicate links.

  Y Removed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:15, 15 December 2022 (UTC)

• Down to Veritable, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:44, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
• Is there any explication of the G, Q and RA staff channels? I didn't see anything, but I could have missed it.

  It is rather complicated, with lots of archaic abbreviations. [1] I meant to write an article on it one day, but lost my source. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

  Then perhaps reword it so that these names aren't used, emphasizing that the duplicate requests through different channels compounded the problems.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:02, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

  Y Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:06, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

• Can't say that I think that the bit about the FMC numbering sequences is important.

• Meh. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

• I suggest that you fix the instances where you have quantities in digits adjacent to gun calibers in digits. Not a requirement here, but it will be a problem for you at ACR, where I assume this goes next.

  Not sure how to do that. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

  Simply spell out the quantities.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:59, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

  Y "the three hundred and thirty six 25-pounders" Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:06, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

• A Royal Navy Force U, under the command of Captain P. H. G. James Awkward. The commander doesn't matter and rework the rest of the sentence. "The RN allocated Force U..." or somesuch

• Y Re-worked. I wasn't sure if Captain Percival Henry Gwynne James was notable or not. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

• "Seaborne tail" is a little repetitive. Find a different term or use pronouns

  Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

• Fix the link for chesses

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:54, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

• Very well done. Only a few quibbles to deal with.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:15, 16 December 2022 (UTC)