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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Bruce Kison/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:36, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Taking this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 07:36, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:


General

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  • Hyphens should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH

Lead

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  • The second paragraph might be better off divided into two to make it more comfortable to read
  • "Bothered by a sore shoulder the next couple of years, " - how many years exactly?
  • Wikilink free agent and bullpen for those unfamiliar with sports terms
  • Remove the wikilink of the second mention of ERA since the term is already link in the lead
  • "but struggled with injuries his first couple of seasons" - in his first
  • Spell out ALCS on the first time it is mentioned
  • Wikilink scout to Scout (sport)

Early life

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  • "before getting selected by the Pittsburgh Pirates in the 14th round of the 1968 Major League Baseball Draft." - the word "Draft" does not need to start with a capital letter

Pittsburgh Pirates (1971-79)

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  • "That strong start netted him" - earned him
  • "That strong start netted him a call-up to the big leagues for the first time in July," - try not to use the term "big leagues" where possible
  • "then picked up the win as the Pirates won 9–5," - repetition of the word "won"
  • "clinching a trip to the World Series." - earning a spot in
  • "Sent to Charleston to prove himself" - It would help to know what exactly he was proving himself for
  • "Used as a starter again in September, he won a couple more games," - how many more games exactly?
  • "After posting an ERA near 6.00 in his first five starts," - ERA close to 6.00
  • "the start would be one of the best of his career.[25][2]" - refs in numerical order please
  • "He joined the Pirates' rotation May 23" - Pirates' rotation on May 23
  • "His most important start of the season came in the Pirates' last game of the year, a game against the Cubs" - repetition of the word "game"
  • Wikilink free agent

California Angels (1980-84) and Boston Red Sox (1985)

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  • "Kison complained of paralysis in his hand and a lack of feeling in three of his dingers after undergoing surgery on his ulnar nerve." - you mean fingers?
  • "Kison was the Opening Day starter for the Angels, the first time in his 13 seasons he got a chance to start on Opening Day." - repetition of the phrase "Opening Day"
  • "Though his career was in jeopardy of being over," - ending
  • "after giving up 6 runs in three starts in a row." - relinquishing six runs
  • Wikilink torn rotator cuff to Rotator cuff tear

Coaching

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  • "He later spent time as the Kansas City Royals' bullpen coach (1992–93), the Royals' pitching coach (1994–98)[51][52][53] and the" -a comma is missing before the stacking of the references
  • Wikilink scout to Scout (sport)
  • "for over ten years, retiring after the 2017 season." - more than

Pitching Style

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  • The second word in the header of this sub-section doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
  • "he actually had more walks (92) than strikeouts (89). " - the word "actually" is not needed here
  • "and he finished his career with over a hundred more innings pitched" - more than

Postseason Appearances & Highlights

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Personal life

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Death

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  • The one sentence in this section would be better off placed in the Personal life section and this section deleted afterward

References

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  • Reference 1 is lacking the work of the source
  • Reference 4 does not have the page number on which the story can be found
  • Reference 7 is missing Sporting News in the work field
  • Reference 23 is missing the page number that the story is featured on

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised here. MWright96 (talk) 12:26, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]