Talk:Bump Elliott

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Good articleBump Elliott has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
February 8, 2008Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on January 1, 2008.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ...that All-American Bump Elliott and his brother Pete Elliott played halfback and quarterback for the Michigan football team that beat the USC Trojans 49-0 in the Rose Bowl 60 years ago on 1 Jan. 1948?
In the newsA news item involving this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "In the news" column on December 12, 2019.

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Short choppy paragraphs. A few quotations need citations. Fair use rationale for the logos

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    Needs some prose tweaks to make the prose flow a bit better
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    A couple of quotations need citations attached.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
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  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    Need fair use rationales for the logos
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Lede's good!

Details:

  • Template:PersondataGreen tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:05, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I got the ndashes, and unlinked a few standalone year dates. WP:MOSNUM says don't link single years.
  • Early life section, last sentence of the first paragraph the quotation needs a citation on it. Easy fix is to just switch the quotation to the end of the sentence.Green tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:08, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same for Purdue section, the fourth sentence in the first paragraph.Green tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:11, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same section, the third paragraph, it is unclear from the context what 'transfer orders' mean. Explain that he was called up for the Marines.Probably can be combined with the following item.Green tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:15, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same section, the last sentence is too short, it can be combined with the previous paragraph.Green tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:17, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • U of M section, the Big Nine MVP subsection. Lots of short choppy sentences. Consider merging or expanding.Green tickY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:28, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same for the 1948 Rose Bowl subsection.Green tickY--Cbl62 (talk) 03:21, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • And again for the Elliott brothers, which might also work better broken up into subsections, the college one under the U of M, the other under coaching.Green tickY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:34, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Another short paragraph in the Coaching section, Assistant coach subsection, the last paragraph.Green tickY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:58, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same section, Head coach at U of M subsection, the last sentence of the second paragraph could use a citation, since is verging on an opinion.
  • Same section and subsection, the last paragraph is only one sentence. Consider merging or expanding.Green tickY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:59, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Athletic director section, fifth paragraph, need a citation for "a coach's AD".Green tickYCbl62 (talk) 03:21, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same section. Last paragraph is one sentence, consider expanding or merging. Also a number of the other paragraphs in here are pretty short, which gives the whole section a choppy to the prose.Green tickY Cbl62 (talk) 03:28, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • For future reference... Wikipedia:WikiProject Succession Box Standardization has put out a new system. The new system uses a new box and headers. The documentation is here Template:S-start. Once you get used to it, it's an easier system. Tony: I'm not familiar with succession boxes. Is this something you could fix??Cbl62 (talk) 06:19, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Need specific to the page fair use rationales for the U of M logo, and probably the Hawkeyes logo.Also the captions for them could be a bit more... interesting?Green tickY--I removed the logos. Since inserting them, I've read that they aren't supposed to be used except in articles on the institution itself.Cbl62 (talk) 03:02, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure what the two Paragraph symbols are doing at the end of the article. ?? I don't see them. Have they already been removed? Cbl62 (talk) 03:28, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
They are gone now. Maybe putting in the persondata got them. Ealdgyth | Talk 03:33, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I removed them yesterday.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 16:26, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.

Ya'll know the drill.Ealdgyth | Talk 16:59, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This sentence "Shortly after the game, Elliott resigned, and athletic director Don Canham hired Bo Schembechler to replace him as head coach. Schembechler would use the memory of the 1968 Ohio State loss to motivate his team the following season." in the Coaching career section really needs a citation. It's giving a motivation to Bo that needs some sort of citation otherwise it's original research. Otherwise everything looks good. The succession box thing is more for future reference, than something I'm going to quibble over. Ealdgyth | Talk 16:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)Green tickY The statement come from the Grady article, and I added a citation for it. Cbl62 (talk) 23:14, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great, passing it now. Ealdgyth | Talk 23:23, 8 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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