Talk:Cabaret (Justin Timberlake song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Esprit15d (talk · contribs) 14:04, 8 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]


  • "American singer-songwriter"—Per this RfC, this should be changed to "singer and songwriter".
  • "a pop and soul song features "—Should be "a pop and soul song which features"
  • "handclaping"—Should be "handclapping"
  • "It is reminiscent of Timbaland's earlier works "—This is an opinion, and should be attributed to someone, like "critics" or "analysts" or "Rolling Stone magazine". See WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV.
  • "Lyrically, finds the singer comparing "—Should be "Lyrically, the song finds the singer comparing". Make sure all the sentences are complete sentences.
  • "As a result of the strong digital downloads, following the "—remove the comma
  • "selling over 3,800 digital copies for the week. "—In which country?
  • "(2013—14)."—Should be "(2013-2014)"
  • The "Writing and production" section needs to be expanded to include release information, like dates, formats, promotional activity from the label.
  • Even though, admittedly, Wikipedia does not have a strict "one sentence, on reference policy," I highly recommend adding more citations behind some of those sentences in the "Writing and production" section, even if it just means putting that same citation at the end of the paragraph behind every sentence. This article will continue to be edited, and as sentences get moved around, and get further and further away from it's citation, that could create drive-by {{citation needed}} tags and claims of original research, which would jeopardize any future good article status.
  • ""Cabaret" is a pop[2] and soul song[3] with a length of four minutes and thirty-three seconds (the shortest song on The 20/20 Experience - 2 of 2)[4] that features "stuttering beatboxing".[5]"— Citations should go behind punctuation. See WP:INTEGRITY
  • "According to Kyle Anderson of Entertainment Weekly"—TAke out "According to"
  • "and compare it "—Should be "compares"
  • " "Are You That Somebody?".[6]"—REmove the period
  • "as much more "dirty-minded""—Should be "as a much more "dirty-minded""
  • "a classic sounding Timbaland beat which according to him"—Should be "a classic Timbaland-sounding beat, which—according to him—"
  • "accompanied by Timbaland's vocals who repeats "—Should be "accompanied by Timbaland, who repeats"
  • "Even though giving mixed review to the album"—Should be "Despite giving a mixed review to the album" (Even though wasn't quite right; it requires another pronoun. I think it's a transitive phrase)
  • "a top track on the album and "—Should be "a top track on the album, and"
  • "the song is smooth and has an addictive hook"—Put quotation marks around this, since it's a quote
  • "with a B- mark"—Put a quotation marks around "B-", and a comma after "mark"
  • " similarly praised Drake's verse writing that complements the song in a perfect way"—This is a very generous summation of what that review actually said, that borders on excessive. Either get closer to what the reviewer said (who didn't say anything about Drake's writing ability) or just quote directly.
  • "style and proves that he is "—Should be "style and proves that he was"
  • "A reviewer of Capital FM, stated"—Remove the comma
  • " why Drake is the rapper on everyone's lips and further "—Should be " why Drake was the rapper on everyone's lips, and further "
  • "artists backed by Timbaland's classic beats."[19]"—Remove the quotation marks since this is not a quote
  • I won't fail you for this, but if you take it to FA, they will. All the endashes under "Personnel" need to be changed to emdashes
  • "The song debuted at number 50 in South Korea[27]"—Add comma after Korea
  • References 8, 10, 19, and 29 are formatted incorrectly
  • I can't see what's wrong with them. — Tomíca(T2ME) 13:44, 28 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • The publishing date should come in parenthesis after the name of the author. In these references, it is either misplaced, or absent altogether. If there is no author cited, the publishing date should come first (still in parenthesis).--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 01:03, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • The external links look great.
  • The images are all great as well.
  • While it is not necessary at all, have you considered adding a sample of the song? It would have to be less than 10% of the song's legnth.
  • I did all the requests, except the ones where Oxford comma is involved, I don't really feel that rule and it's not you-have-to-use-it so I choose not to. And for the sample I would upload although I am not really familiar with doing that. — Tomíca(T2ME) 13:44, 28 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • None of the commas that I suggested you add were Oxford commas; they were grammatical errors that need to be corrected. It seems like you already fixed all of them except the one behind "mark" which still needs to be corrected. As I said, the sample is not mandatory, so don't worry about it. The article is still good without it.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 01:03, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

As I said earlier, this article is really strong so far, and I think is really close to being a GA. I am placing the article on hold until these issues are addressed.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 15:20, 12 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I added the comma and am promoting the article. Great job!--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 18:22, 15 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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