Talk:Carlo Leone/GA1
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Reviewer: Muboshgu (talk · contribs) 16:08, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
The "Early life and education" section consists only of Carlo Leone was born in Rose, Italy. He earned a Bachelor of Business Administration and Master of Business Administration from Sacred Heart University.
without any sourcing. It also lacks context on his early life in Rome and why or when he moved to Connecticut from Italy. He served in the U.S. Air Force. What was his rank? His resignation and taking the position at ConnDOT shoud be better integrated, as they're clearly related. The information on his elections should be in prose, not with those sentences above each election box in the "Electoral history" section. Leone won the 2012,[7][8] 2014,[9] 2016,[10] and 2018[11] elections
is not enough prose explanation of his electoral history in that section.
There are issues with capitalization, such as in the {{about}} template, "State Senate", "148th District", "Connecticut House Of Representatives", etc. I see punctuation mistakes like Republican Bob Kolenberg, the election was held
, where the comma should be a semi colon. Be mindful of MOS:NUMERAL and spell out numbers less than ten. Provide more information where necessary, like the "police reform bill". What reforms did it contain? Then there are lots of other areas where copy editing is needed, like Martin Looney drafted a bill that would towns
. There's On December 31, 2020, it was announced
, which is poor phrasing. "It was announced" is wording that should never be used on Wikipedia, let along in a GA. There's also a WP:CITEBOMB on his resignation from the state senate. And finally, the navbox template for current senators is still on the page, though he resigned seven months ago.
I don't see this article getting to GA status in a week. It needs some major revisions. I didn't even spot check any sources that are present or ensure that this is thorough. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:08, 7 August 2021 (UTC)