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Reviewer: Shudde (talk · contribs) 06:10, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try and get the review under-way shortly. Once I start I'll go through and add comments/questions as I read through the article; these won't necessarily be points that need to be addressed for the article to pass, but I'd probably be good to try and address them all—even if just a comment/clarification. Once I've done that I'll try and give a summary, and whether or not I believe the article has met the criteria. I view this process as collaborative so I invite comments and questions from the nominator. - Shudde talk 06:10, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

  • First thing, there is only one image other than the logo. I think it's perfectly reasonable to expect more on such a topic. A quick search on commons shows a few photos that should be okay are there. Maybe see if there are any images that will improve to the article and add them.

Team history:

Logo and uniforms

  • "The team name 'Panthers' had been the one the Richardsons had always wanted to give to their football team." - apostrophe? Also doesn't read particularly well
  • " The Panthers organization ultimately decided on white, black, and blue jerseys with white and silver pants" versus "Eventually, the team settled on white, black and blue jerseys to be matched with white and silver pants."[2] - this may be close paraphrasing (probably not though); however I think that you should double check this section as it relies heavily on that one source. Might be worth giving it a bit of a rewrite to avoid any chance of Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing — I'm not an expert on this, and personally think it's ok, but it might be worth your time.

Stadium

Culture

  • Could more be said about Sir Purr and Carolina Topcats - for example the inspiration for the mascot? Could you be more specific about their role-not all readers will be familiar with this aspect of NFL matches.
  • Why was Rosinski fired?
    • I elaborated a bit on it - basically, the Panthers did not say, but Rosinski believes it is because of a comment he had made in an interview.
  • What is a "color commentator"?
    • I have linked it; essentially, a color commentator assists the play-by-play commentator by offering analysis, background information, etc. when there is no play going on. Toa Nidhiki05 21:55, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is the section "Training camp and practice facility" located where it is, and not in the Stadium section?
    • I more or less based it off of the Kansas City Chiefs page, which is a good article. Toa Nidhiki05 21:55, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      • I'm not really a believer that all articles on similar topics should be set-out the same way; especially if only for consistencies sake. It seems like something that should be included in stadium (which is their main "facility", and these training grounds are actually attached to it). If there is a reason to keep it where it is then I can accept that, but keeping it there because article XYZ does seems odd to me. - Shudde talk 10:29, 29 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Rivalries

Notable players

Ownership and administration

lead

Overall

  • There are a couple of other things I think should be included:
  • Information on team and individual records. Doesn't need to be comprehensive, but at least the most notable records.
  • More prose regarding the head coaches in the "Ownership and administration" section; again doesn't need to be much, even if it only discusses the most notable/prolific coaches.
  • Other than that pretty happy. I think the article is referenced adequately, and other than those two things above, the broadness criteria is met. Would be good to see more images, and there are obviously a few things with prose, but nothing really bad. Good work on the article; I'll place it on hold. Feel free to ping me on my talk page if you have any questions/comments. I'll try and check back here regularly if you have anything to ask. - Shudde talk 08:23, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

New comments

Great. Congratulations, really good work. I've passed the article. - Shudde talk 11:17, 30 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]