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Reviewer: 23W (talk · contribs) 06:17, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • "something that was attributed to pre-Thanksgiving travel": rephrase as "a decline that was attributed ..."
  • "The critical response was mostly negative": rephrase as "Critical response was mostly negative".
  • "Using a hand scanner": comma after scanner.
  • I notice a lot of thens in the plot section. Most of them can be removed, as the section already moves in the historical present tense.
  • "his sixth of the series": sixth what?
  • "He has also previously": shorten to "He previously".
  • "who appeared for fourth occasion": fourth occasion or four occasions?
  • Should have been "the fourth occasion". The second half of the sentence also didn't make a great deal of sense in that context, so I added a couple of words to improve the flow (and general understanding of what I was trying to say! :) ). Miyagawa (talk) 11:00, 31 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are the days of the week relevant in the last paragraph of the production section?

Cool article. On hold for 14 days. 23W 09:27, 31 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]