Talk:Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut/GA1
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Hello. I'll be reviewing this article. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for how I'm going to be organizing this. Let's start. The Flash {talk} 00:44, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- ""Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut" is the 13th and finale episode of South Park's first season, it first aired[...]" -> "[...]first season. It first[...]"
- "He discovers that his father is most likely a man, his mother[...]" -> "[...]a man his mother[...]"
- Wikilink to David A. Goodman
- "The episode met with positive responses[...]" -> "[...]was met with positive[...]"
Plot
[edit]- Can you make the transition from Kenny, Kyle, and Stan filming Cartman to Cartman wondering about his father flow better?
- Wikilink to Denver Broncos
Production
[edit]- I'm not liking the quality of File:Jay Leno (1993) by Alan Light.jpg - be better to replace it with File:JayLeno.jpg or {{double image|right|TreyParker-2007.jpg|130|David A. Goodman by Gage Skidmore.jpg|130|[[Trey Parker]] (left) and [[David A. Goodman]] (right) wrote "Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut".}}
- Wikilink to David A. Goodman, once more
- It would be better just to put a section called "References," with the book, and make the current one "notes" - then make all book references simply Weinstock
- I quite confused with the wording for the guest appearance. It doesn't flow well. Can you clear it up and explain why Clooney's appearance is important.
- "[...]the song used at "The Drunken Barn Dance", Walters was romantically[...]" -> "[...]"The Drunken Barn Dance." Walters was[...]"
- "However, instead of continueing the episode's[...]" -> "of continuing"
Theme
[edit]- "Thus confirming a theory by Paul Cantor[...]" -> "This confirmed[...]"
Release and reception
[edit]- "[...]the United States on cable television channel Comedy Central[...]" -> "[...]on the cable television channel[...]"
- Move the complete week marathon ratings to before the Canada info.
- This seems more logic to me, as the episode was broadcast before the average could be computed.--Music26/11 11:29, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
- Season two's best episodes? Don't you mean season one?
- "In a top ten, compiled by Chicago Tribune reporter Allan Johnson, regarding South Park's best episodes[...]" -> "In a top ten list of South Park episode[...]"
Images
[edit]- Just that one I mentioned in Production. The Flash {talk} 00:44, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
Final say
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Nice work. I've gone ahead and passed it - thanks for taking care of my issues :) The Flash {talk} 21:59, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
- Took care of the issues you pointed out.--Music26/11 11:35, 22 October 2009 (UTC)