Talk:Case deBruijn/GA1

GA Review[edit]

Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:22, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 18:41, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:41, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

The first sentence is a lot to handle. Maybe just end it after placekicker and then say He played on game...

Early life and education[edit]

When young, his family moved to a suburban community in Washington, I know this is silly, but you probably need to mention that he moved to America. his family moved to America, settling down in a suburban...
1982 NFL Draft, only behind Rohn Stark you can delete , only

Professional career[edit]

Was he a one-step kicker, or a three-step kicker? Can you clarify.
, who they had just released in favor of deBruijn a week prior repetitive to the sentence earlier. Can just delete.
He felt confident in camp, saying "I felt that I was going to have a chance. the repetition of "felt" isn't great. Maybe just He was confident
as part of the roster cuts either just "roster cuts" or "their roster cuts"

Later life[edit]

Maybe tack on the mining company before Newmont.

References[edit]

Ref #1 and #7, #12, #13 and #17 have a different date format.
Spot checks:
- Ref #3 looks good.
- Ref #6 looks good in both uses.
- Ref #7 looks good.
- Ref #10 looks good.
- Ref #15 looks good.
- Ref #18 looks good.
- Ref #22 looks good.

Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:31, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Gonzo fan2007: I believe I've addressed all of your points. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:41, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Nice work, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:22, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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