Talk:Celestiial/GA1
GA Reassessment[edit]
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I will be doing the GA Reassessment on this article as part of the GA Sweeps project.
What jumps out at me is the rough prose. Here are some examples:
- "Also, the album will be produced with the intention of producing an album, something that was never the case with Desolate North." I understand the idea of the statement, but it is awkward and repetitive. Could it be reworded?
- "This is because it will now be more professionally produced, (by Chet Scott[5]) as well as having a real drummer.[9] As well as the harps and flutes, new instruments such as hammered dulcimers and nyckelharpas are due to be used, as well as more powerful guitars." Three "as well as..." in two sentences, repetitive wording.
I did some copy editing for spelling and updating some of the text that was outdated. While I'm uncomfortable with some of the prose I feel that the article is still good. The references are solid and the links are good. The photo is acceptable. I will keep it at GA with the hope that someone can come along and do a thorough copy edit to improve the prose. H1nkles (talk) 15:58, 29 May 2009 (UTC)