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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)
Will read through this article and give comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
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Early life
[edit]- Split off the paragraph into two at the point Matthews signed his letter of intent so it is not uncomfortable to read
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:16, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- "In his youth basketball took a backseat to the trombone and skateboard, but he began to take basketball seriously the summer before his high school freshman year" - {{xt|In his youth, he played the trombone and skateboard, but started taking basketball seriously in the summer before his school freshman year."
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:18, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- "He committed to John Calipari and Kentucky on February 26, 2014 during his junior year." - reword this sentence so it reads as follows: Matthews committed to playing basketball with John Calipri and the Kentucky Wildcats on February 26, 2014 during his junior year.
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- "Matthews was the first commit for Kentucky's 2015 class." - Matthews was the first to commit to playing basketball for Kentucky's 2015 class.
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:24, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- "Matthews earned tournament MVP." - Hence, Matthew earned the tournament's Most Valuable Player (MVP) award.
- Done without the Hence, because there is no content to support it. Hence would require documentation of a superlative performance in the preceding sentences.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:27, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- "He officially signed his National Letter of Intent on National Signing Day, November 22, 2014."
- I don't understand this point.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:47, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
- "for the 21–8 St. Rita's team that was eliminated from the 2014 IHSA Class 4A playoffs by the Jahlil Okafor-led Whitney M. Young Magnet High School team." - repetition of "team"
- I am just going along here, but I removed the 2nd use of the word.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:49, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
- "During Matthews four-year high school" - Matthews'
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:51, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
- "Following his senior season, he was a first team Associated Press Class 4A All-state selection." - After his senior season, he was a selection for the Associated Press' Class-4A All-State first team.
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD)
Kentucky
[edit]- "Matthews three starts" - same issue as the second to last one in the early life sub-section
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:58, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
"against #16 ranked Louisville." - No. 16- I have written dozens of WP:CBBALL articles and I have never used No.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:59, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
- We can gloss over that query then. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
- I have written dozens of WP:CBBALL articles and I have never used No.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:59, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
Michigan
[edit]- "Following the season he had a medical procedure on his hip." - is there any information that says why he had a medical procedure on his hip?
- "He served on the scout team for the 2016–17 Michigan Wolverines men's basketball team." - reptition of "team"
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:06, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
- "He posted career-highs of 28 points and 8 rebounds in the first round of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament on November 20 against LSU" - Matthews posted career-highs of 28 points and eight rebounds in the first round game of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament against LSU on November 20
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 7 February 2018 (UTC)
- "The following night he" add a comma between night and he
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:30, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
- "Since Moe Wagner added 21 points and 10 rebounds the team" - same issue as above but with the words "rebounds" and "the" this time
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:32, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
- "On December 21, Michigan handed the previously winless Alabama A&M Bulldogs a 97–47 defeat" - On December 21, Michigan was defeated by the previously Alabama A&M Bulldogs in a 97-47 defeat
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:59, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
- "as Matthews posted another career high with 31 points." - as Matthews posted 31 points, another career high.
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:34, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
Personal
[edit]- I'd personally move the names of his parents to make it the first sentence of this section and put his siblings after that
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:20, 8 February 2018 (UTC)
References
[edit]CBS Sports in reference 5 should be moved to the publisher fieldESPN needs to be moved to the publisher field in reference 13 and do the same with rivals.com and 247sports.com in the next two citations- The Author is needed in Reference 12.
- Have done the third query myself. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
Those are all the issues I found during my read-through of this article. Going to put this review on hold. MWright96 (talk) 15:34, 29 January 2018 (UTC)
- Okay think this article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)