Talk:Chris Creighton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 22:16, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass
Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

Is there a reference for his DOB?
- Added. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Can 2014 season be linked?
- Done. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Creighton served please add formally
Please Wikilink Kenyon College
- Done. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
As the head coach at Wabash in early 2000s, needs a comma
- Done. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

Here would be a good place to reference his DOB
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Reference #2 doesn't say his family moved to Seattle
- It's a reasonable inference, given that his early life was in San Francisco but that he played high school football in Seattle. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In 1989 Kenyon won a share of the North Coast Athletic Conference (NCAC) title, Kenyon's first and As of 2020 only conference championship. Why is As of capitalized?
- Template parameter fail. It's fixed now. Mackensen (talk) 21:45, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Please put commas after stating the year
- Fixed, I think. Mackensen (talk) 21:45, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Assuming Jake Knott is this Jake Knott please Wikilink his name
- Different person. Mackensen (talk) 22:45, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Should athletic hall of fame be capitalised?
- Maybe? It appears the proper name is "Kenyon Athletic Hall of Fame" (see [1]), so I think in the current usage it wouldn't be capitalized. Mackensen (talk) 21:45, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Coaching career

Concordia and Sweden

Is there any more information on Concordia? (which I at first assumed was Concordia University lol).
- Probably not. Coordinators don't get much coverage at that level. I can take another look. Mackensen (talk) 21:40, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I think it is interesting he was hired via phone without being seen (per ref 8) especially for the time period. Could this be added in?
- Added. Mackensen (talk) 21:40, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Manchester

Seeing as he spent four years here, could this not be expanded a bit more?
- See above regarding Concordia. I've actually visited Manchester's campus; it's pretty but it's small and not near much of anything. I'll look again. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ottawa

Please include the website for reference #16
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In 2002 add a comma
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
won their first NCAC title, finished undefeated for the first time since 1982, and made the playoffs for the first time since 1977 does this have to be in quotes? Is there not another way to reword this?
- Reworded. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
He was also be named - do you mean would also be?
- Yes. Sigh. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Drake

Reference #13 doesn't support On December 22, 2007, Creighton was named the head football coach...
- Added a reference. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Under Creighton add a comma
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Eastern Michigan

English had gone 11–46 over the past five seasons. In his first two seasons, Creighton won only three games can these be combined into one sentence such as English had gone 11–46 over the past five seasons and Creighton won only three games in his first two seasons.
- Joined with a semicolon. I think it works. Mackensen (talk) 21:42, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In 2016 add a comma
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:42, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Following the 2018 season add a comma
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:42, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In 2019 add a comma
- Fixed. Mackensen (talk) 21:42, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Please define OC since it is being used for the first time
- Added above. Mackensen (talk) 21:42, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Mackensen, thanks for the quick fixes. Just ping me when done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 21:46, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

* @HickoryOughtShirt?4: you're welcome and thank you for undertaking the review. I've addressed all the copyediting stuff, but let me take a few hours to see if I can dig anything further up on Concordia and Manchester. Mackensen (talk) 21:47, 22 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

* @HickoryOughtShirt?4: back to you. Mackensen (talk) 00:24, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Mackensen, I got sick of the US Debate and decided to check into Wikipedia. I am happy witht the changes and am passing this article. Congrats! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 02:11, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

HickoryOughtShirt?4, a wise choice I think. Appropriately, I'm watching Arkansas State play Appalachian State. Thank you again for undertaking the review and for your helpful suggestions. Best, Mackensen (talk) 02:20, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]