Talk:Clive Hulme/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:30, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
I'll review this later this week. Hog Farm (talk) 18:30, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
Criteria[edit]
1. Prose ✓ Pass
2. Verifiability ✓ Pass
3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass
4. Neutral ✓ Pass
5. Stable ✓ Pass
6. Illustrations ✓ Pass
7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass
Comments[edit]
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- Wikilink warrant officer in the infobox
- "and a recipient of the Victoria Cross (VC), the highest award of the British Commonwealth for gallantry "in the face of the enemy"" - You need another comma between Commonwealth and for.
- Wiklink Battle of Crete in the lead
- Is home front capitalized? Is it a specific unit of the New Zealand military, or is it a reference to the home front?
- Good question; in the infobox, I've put the caps on Home but not front and linked to Home front during World War II. It seems to be used sentence case otherwise so have replicated that in the main text. Zawed (talk) 08:00, 14 April 2020 (UTC)
- "to Harold Hulme, a clerk and his wife" - Comma between clerk and and
- " and soon found himself, leading attacks" - I don't think the comma should be there
- Wikilink Stylos
- Done.
- " On his return to Nelson in October 1941, he was honoured with a civic reception" - Can we get the exact date?
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- "His son, Denny Hulme, was active in motorsports, winning several Grand Prix and becoming the Formula One World Champion in 1967" - The provided source only states "he became the world motor-racing champion in 1967", the additional details need a citation.
- Ref 21 takes me to the nzherald homepage.
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Looks pretty good. A little cleanup and one ref to work on. Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 17:01, 13 April 2020 (UTC)