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GA Review

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Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have the full review up soon. Dana boomer (talk) 02:27, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    • The last of the journal articles (Zrzavy) deadlinks.
    • The 7th external link (Wonders of the Seas) deadlinks.
    • Lead:
    • "corals may have been present shortly before 490 million years ago and diversified a little after 490 million years ago." Is it necessary to repeat the year twice? And, "diversified a little" is rather unencyclopedic. Perhaps "diversified somewhat"?
    • "On the other hand, some large jellyfish" - "on the other hand" is unencyclopedic and cliche-ish.
    • I agree that a "signpost" statement is necessary here to contrast the two facts. What I am concerned about, however, is that the usage of "on the other hand" may not be clear to people whose first language is something other than English, as they may not understand the metaphor. What if you were to replace it with something else, such as "Despite this" or "In spite of this" or "Nonetheless" or "Notwithstanding"?
      • "Despite this" or "In spite of this" or "Nonetheless" or "Notwithstanding" are not quite the same, they imply an obstacle overcome. "On the other hand" simply draws attention to another aspect with different implications, and AFAIK it's completely standard English. It's the standard dictionary translation of the ancient Greek ... μεν ... δε ..., and Larry Niven felt sufficiently confident about its intelligibility to riff on it by titling one of his SF novels On the Gripping Hand - which is Motie for "on the other hand". --Philcha (talk) 18:24, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • There are quite a few red links in this article. If there is a good chance that these topics will prove notable enough to have articles in the future, it is fine to leave them, but if there is not that chance, then please de-link them. Also, please check to make sure that there are not articles out there already that are just at a slightly different name - I fixed one red link that was caused by a missing "(".
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    • References 1, 3 need publishers.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    • I have completed the review of images, prose, and stability, and begun the review of the prose, getting up to the Cnidocytes section. It's getting late in my part of the world though, so I'm going to wrap things up for the night. I will be back in the morning to finish my review of the prose. If you wish to work on the minor issues outlined above in the intervening time, I have no problem with that, or if you want to wait until I'm completely finished with the review, that's fine too. Please let me know if you have any questions. Dana boomer (talk) 03:08, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resp to preliminary comments

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I've struck the comments in my review that I consider completed, and added a couple more comments. I'm finished with my review, so once the two prose issues are completed and the two publishers added to the references, the article should be good to go for GA status. Dana boomer (talk) 16:14, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've added publisher to the Taxonomicon refs, although I'd never heard of publisher being required for web refs.
  • I fixed 1 red link that has an appropriate article under a similar name.
  • camera eye should get either its own article or a major section of a larger article. WP's articles in visual systems are in poor shape but I've seen signs of gradual upgrading.
  • The rest are significant cnidarian taxa. --Philcha (talk) 18:14, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Allright, everything looks good, so I'm going to pass this article to GA status. I'll give on the "on the other hand" phrasing - it's a minor detail and not really something worth arguing about :) Please let me know if you have any questions. Dana boomer (talk) 20:47, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]