Talk:Covenant (Millennium)/GA1
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 15:13, 17 May 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: "…travels to Utah to construct a profile on a convicted murderer (Finn) who is asking for the death sentence." This kind of makes it sound like the murderer is asking for the death sentence. Maybe just reorder or reword the sentence
- Lede: "The episode was viewed by approximately 6.7 million households in its original broadcast; and has received positive reviews, with Moresco's script praised for its subtlety." I don't think this warrants a semicolon. I would sub the semi for a comma and put "it" after 'and'
- Plot: "Garry plead guilty to murders…" I assume this was supposed to be 'pled' or 'pleads'
- Plot: "…has linked him to the murder weapon—a wood-carving chisel." I would replace the emdash with a colon
Those are the only issues, and they're only minor and nitpicky. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:25, 18 May 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for reviewing this one for me. I've addressed the points you've raised; the first one was a misunderstanding though, as the character was asking for himself to be executed, I guess I forgot to add that in the plot section. "Plead" should have been "pled", I still stumble over US English differences; and I reworded the chisel sentence a little as I'm not a fan of colons in prose. Changes can be seen here. Thanks again! GRAPPLE X 03:53, 18 May 2012 (UTC)