Talk:Cyclone Dina/GA1
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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 03:10, 14 November 2012 (UTC) I have always had a soft spot for the islands situated in the Indian Ocean that have been so moulded by French administration, including Reunion, Mauritius, Madagascar, or Mayotte. On those grounds, I will review. I am currently busy reviewing two other articles, however. As soon as the first one of those reviews is concluded, I will commence this one. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 03:10, 14 November 2012 (UTC)
The Lead[edit]
The article appears good upon first glance, so the consummate review will start:
"Intense Tropical Cyclone Dina was a destructive cyclone that caused record flooding across parts of Réunion." No adjectives needed, so remove the word destructive.
- Removed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 03:29, 20 November 2012 (UTC)
"Dina attained its peak intensity on January 20..." How about achieved instead. Use your discretion.
- Changed to achieved. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 03:29, 20 November 2012 (UTC)
The rest of the lead looks fine. Moving on to the infobox...
Infobox[edit]
The picture checks out fine, so the infobox passes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by QatarStarsLeague (talk • contribs) 18:00, 18 November 2012 (UTC)
Meteorological history[edit]
"...an extended area of convection connected to the monsoon." Monsoon season that is?
- Tropical cyclones can develop from the monsoon trough, which is what that piped link from monsoon is for. A monsoon season is different from the monsoon trough in that it's a weather pattern rather than a feature (in the broadest of senses). Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
"About three hours earlier, the JTWC also upgraded the storm to tropical cyclone status." the JTWC had also...
- Changed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
The rest of this section is good. The image checks out.
Preparation, impact, and aftermath-Mauritius[edit]
To start, all geographic mentions in the second paragraph need to be wikilinked no more, and no less, than once.
- As far as I can tell, they are. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
"For approximately ten hours, the country was cut-off from the outside world, with all communications disrupted." I need a reference for this line.
- It falls under reference 12, not sure why you're looking for a double citation. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
Other than that, we are good.
Preparation, impact, and aftermath-Reunion[edit]
"while the vanilla and geranium crops sustained heavy damage." Any reason why vanilla isn't wikilinked.
- Linked Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
Everything else is good in this section.
See also[edit]
I know this is such a "pequena" section, but if Cyclone Gamede is mentioned in this article, why is this article not mentioned on Cyclone Gamede?
- Article was made after Gamede's so no one added it to the other one. I just put it there now. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)
Conclusion[edit]
Other than these issues, the article is in passing shape. As soon as the outstanding issues are addressed, I believe I can pass this one! QatarStarsLeague (talk) 19:06, 20 November 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks very much for the review QatarStarsLeague! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:41, 21 November 2012 (UTC)